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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
A child's dream A simple prayer Heaven's arms Await her there Drops of water In her hair Elfin dancer Graceful mare Golden aura 'Round her head Her blood crimson Never red Serving alive Never dead Always spoken Never said She stares skyward Drinks its tears Angels singing Piercing ears Cloudy footsteps Comfort fears Dies in moments Lives for years Rocks of flesh and Hearts of stone Gentle whispers Shatter bone Though a mortal She has known Places that no Man can own Priceless birthright Gems for all She has three stones Each is small Where she dances Others fall Heaven speaks and She stands tall A child's dream A simple prayer Heaven's arms Await her there Drops of water In her hair Elfin dancer Graceful mare |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There is nothing simple about this. It is, to me, a shattering piece of work. There is a lot of depth here, and as you encourage critiques, I would ask where your inspiration came for this work. And I am looking forward to reading more from you! |
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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
This is a very personal poem to me, and I cannot dare to explain it fully. However, I will say that I was inspired by the effects of a service I did to one of my dearest friends. This service made us bond in a way that neither of us could really understand. I had to write something about it, and this is what the result was. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Then your friend has someone very special in her life. Again, I am going to look forward to your writings. I do believe you have a very special gift. Karilea |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I will be looking forward to your work too, as I am really enjoying the depth of it. Again, loved this one.  ~* Carpe' Diem *~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (05-18-2002 08:14 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssss) Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, you have such a loving golden heart that reflects the innocence of that child with the wings of this dancer! (sigh) This is so very touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friedn, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisite!!... ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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