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elfin_tigress
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 101
Someplace

0 posted 2002-05-18 05:58 PM

A child's dream
A simple prayer
Heaven's arms
Await her there
Drops of water
In her hair
Elfin dancer
Graceful mare

Golden aura
'Round her head
Her blood crimson
Never red
Serving alive
Never dead
Always spoken
Never said

She stares skyward
Drinks its tears
Angels singing
Piercing ears
Cloudy footsteps
Comfort fears
Dies in moments
Lives for years

Rocks of flesh and
Hearts of stone
Gentle whispers
Shatter bone
Though a mortal
She has known
Places that no
Man can own

Priceless birthright
Gems for all
She has three stones
Each is small
Where she dances
Others fall
Heaven speaks and
She stands tall

A child's dream
A simple prayer
Heaven's arms
Await her there
Drops of water
In her hair
Elfin dancer
Graceful mare

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-05-18 06:05 PM

There is nothing simple about this. It is, to me, a shattering piece of work. There is a lot of depth here, and as you encourage critiques, I would ask where your inspiration came for this work. And I am looking forward to reading more from you!

elfin_tigress
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 101
Someplace

2 posted 2002-05-18 06:17 PM

This is a very personal poem to me, and I cannot dare to explain it fully. However, I will say that I was inspired by the effects of a service I did to one of my dearest friends. This service made us bond in a way that neither of us could really understand. I had to write something about it, and this is what the result was.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-05-18 06:24 PM

Then your friend has someone very special in her life. Again, I am going to look forward to your writings. I do believe you have a very special gift.

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2002-05-18 08:13 PM

I will be looking forward to your work too, as I am really enjoying the depth of it. Again, loved this one.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (05-18-2002 08:14 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-05-18 10:04 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, you have such a loving golden heart that reflects the innocence of that child with the wings of this dancer! (sigh) This is so very touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friedn, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2002-05-18 10:46 PM

...Exquisite!!...

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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