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There Must Be Something More ...
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There Must Be Something More ... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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There Must Be Something More ... Where once my mind was filled with hope, My will, now shattered, fights to cope; Too burdened by the daily strife With useless wants and needs in life. I know you may not understand The dreams I’ve had ... the things I’ve planned; It’s not surprising, for you see, They often have eluded “me”. No time is left to chase a dream ... Reality is too extreme, It’s wicked force, like pure disease Contaminates my fantasies. A vortex seems to suck me in, Then steals my strength from deep within; Confused and weary, I am dragged From day to day, left bound and gagged. The dreams I had so long ago Have vanished to the depths below ... No longer, do they raise their head, If truth be known ... they’re long since dead. I do not live ... I just exist, Yet somehow manage to subsist; If you would look, I’m sure you’d see, How empty I have come to be. /Kit McCallum |
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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
Oh my, I hope you're okay... I honestly know how you feel. I hope you really don't feel this way--it's awful! This is such a beautiful poem, and it tugged at my heart. You may feel like you've lost the war, but you've only lost if you've given up. Hugs and kisses and chocolate and flowers and love! --Elfin |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, The song you sang within this poem Is the slightest little moan? I’ve looked into your loving eyes And saw their golden butterflies. You radiate a transient charm That speaks to me a nine alarm And if I could loose fifty years You’d have a beau to burn your ears. You are a flower beyond say With a lovely hypnotic way That turned my weary head about That surely was beyond a doubt. I will not hear these sad laments Or even let them cast ferment. You will remain my butterfly That writes your hews across the sky. Please do not cry of life’s despair You light the fires of my dare.   |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh there is so much more, and this just lets one yearn to reach out in hope, yet once again... How you make us think! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A nice expression of the feelings that you are experiencing now Kit....James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so well written..I know all these feelings ... seems like you can't get them to subside at times. I love this picture of you *s M |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
How empty I've become you say? Don't let your mood get stuck this way No emptiness in you sweet love When you write words like those above And even if you feel sometimes unfulfillness, when writing rhymes allow yourself this single day but never throw your dreams away Dreams are foundations on wich we stay Dreams are the reason we go on and play So when you're in this mood my friend It's not your dreams away you must send Love, Titia Beautiful poem you wrote A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (05-18-2002 06:06 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Wow, Kit.....what a great poem about burnout! where no one's call, you'll have to heed no makeup, will you have to wear no need you'll have to style your hair if you're too tired, permission to stay unadorned...in bed all day and all your meals should be brought in by husband, wearing loving grin no work...for you, should he allow please hold him to this solemn vow but poems...you must continue to write for that will keep you in our sight  ~ resting up hugsLyra |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I looked....I saw nothing empty. I saw a lady with a love of life that far exceeded her setbacks. I saw laughter and smiles and a determination to win...I saw a lady who will not be denied, who will find enjoyment in the pleasure of life, regardless of what obstacles present themselves. I saw a grin that will always win....I saw Kit McCallum |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And I vote with Michael on this one .... You surely are not a quitter and you are quite a lady... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (BIG HUGGGSSSSSSSS) Oh Kit, never say that, don't ever say that, you are a very special person to us all, just think about all the wonderful things you've done for so many! You are such a wonderful contributor to this community and if it wasn't for you, the Deputy Mod Squad would have never been possible, just as you have inspired so many of us on all the forums, including me for one! You also make your family and friends so very proud too, sweet friend, and I know that ahead of you you will find so much more joy and as you follow your dreams, you will always find a smile! (kiss on cheek) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, we are always here for you, God Bless you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well yes I saw all that Balladeer saw, but I also saw a reflection of something we spoke of. Remember my saying sweetie, "start where you want to finish". Sometimes just being able to sign because you see something beatiful is worth more than all the money in the world compared to a sigh of frustration or sadness. The feelings conveyed in this poem I knew once so well, but now I sigh at the wonders of this world instead. Hang in there!  Consider yourself hugged! ~* Carpe' Diem *~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (05-18-2002 07:54 PM).] |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Kit hi there this is what I call writing, the rhythm the rhyme the internal flow are as smooth as water over glass. Absolutely exquisite writing, I wish I could write like this, however I know I never will so I won’t wish for what I know won’t occur. Very well done, I really do love your work   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Kit, you lovely lovely lady. I do hope all is well and these are just frustrating feelings.... I have these a lot...so many things I still want to do, and I just don't see them happening as fast as I would like. Be well Kit...be happy. ~Hugs~ Love the beautiful picture of you!!  ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear Kit Sometimes there is just too much on your plate, I know this feeling so well. It has made me want to take the plate and throw it against the wall, especially a person like you who feels the need to do everything so well. You can pick the things you feel you must do and try saying no to others. Life is to short and you, my beautiful friend, should enjoy it! Oh...wonderfully written poem!  v[This message has been edited by Martie (05-18-2002 08:30 PM).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You always seem so strong and self reliant and this poem gives me a perspective on the Kit that we don't often see. The poem itself is so well done that it 'hurts' to read it. I know that whatever YOU want in life, whatever dream YOU want to follow is the right way to go. Have faith in yourself and you'll come out on top.  |
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Fee Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 381Melbourne, Australia |
Kit, I hold my hand out for you to hold onto anyday. I can relate to every word. You go through the motions of daily life, but you somewhere somehow forgot how to live it. Your words say so much more, just remember that you still have your spirit within, you just need to keep that little bit of hope alive and hold onto it with all your might. Holding you close, you have touched my life with so many of the words you write. Just hang in there. Fee Expressions, |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
YOU are soemthing more, and then again... like this dark twist Kit-A-Rooni... makes me smile that dark smile reserved for good reflection. Hugs C |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kit, this tugged at my heart so tremendously... a very good write, but yours always are. but this had something extra added to it... that just really touched me deep inside. perhaps because i can relate far too well to what you write of  ...i agree with allthe comments made above mine, you are an amazing lady with a beautiful gift and heart...may all your dreams come true. take care. amy p.s...it's NEVER too late...just don't give up...keep fighting my dear friend. "you can't stop |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kit darling girl this is outstanding writing again you’ve painted the poetic picture, this is a snapshot of a life spent playing catch up. You really are an excellent writer darling girl, the silk smooth flow of this, the perfect tempo and rhyme it is excellent writing. You know I often envy you your ability to write such utterly perfect poetry. But then it is rather like a candle being jealous of the sun, totally pointless. So I am content to read your wonderful poems, to travel along your lines of divine poetry to arrive in a poetic paradise that is PiP’s I love this utterly utterly love it Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I know this torrent of emotions too well. But you are indeed something much more, you ARE a talented poet and a kindhearted person and I am thankful for knowing you and I wish you the best and hope that this is not reality-based on your part. Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Even in anger, loss or despair, yr words shine like the  .So yes, that's what I call poetry. Much love to you. Mike She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-20-2002 01:04 AM).] |
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andEmmamakes3 Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 66Kent |
Kit I feel as I know you, your hand and heart have reached out and touched me many many times. Your writing is incredibly beautiful carrying within it an indefinable quality that shows the worth of the woman. YOU are a woman, of compassion, talent, love hope and most of all you are someone I look up to. We all have our favourite writers, Krissy and Mum both have you in their top five, I have you in my top two. Your writing is incredibly descriptive and well presented. YOU are one of the stars that light the heavens. BTW I love this piece of writing Its Mushy’s youngest daughter here I've been a fan of your writing like forever, but Mum wishing to keep PiP's as her sanctuary refused to let me join. However after Krissy joined she had to cede her position becoming untenable as it were. Emma  Eternity, stands laughing at old time |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
From this melancholy mood you speak where waves of muse flow to and fro I feel the seedlings of life's truth stop to germinate and grow. And beyond the season of thier growth these tiny seedlings when mature show me the harvest of your worth beyond the hurt where poet's score. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Kit, your heart will never be empty, you bring warmth and talent to us all and here you are always at home. Take our hands and we will walk Share your words and we will talk If your hearts in need of care Remember we are always there. Enjoyed the write. Sincerely Rick |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey Kit - You need to be Kaboodled? ...I can do that for ya... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A vortex seems to suck me in, Then steals my strength from deep within; Confused and weary, I am dragged From day to day, left bound and gagged. The dreams I had so long ago Have vanished to the depths below ... No longer, do they raise their head, If truth be known ... they’re long since dead. I do not live ... I just exist, Yet somehow manage to subsist; If you would look, I’m sure you’d see, How empty I have come to be. Though I would be most honored to do so, I can't, with any honesty, call you my twin or my mirror... you're prettier, more talented, and we won't even begin to compare energy levels (for I have none.) *G* But there are times when I'd swear you'd been plundering the caverns of my mind and shining a light onto all those heart-hurts that seem unending. *S* I could close my eyes and your words would still sear across my brain, burning with each pen stroke. This is one of those times... and the only thing that makes it bearable is that I once again hear life in my voice... and hope lilt and laughter soon lift yours. Magnificent writing! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I wanted to be able to come back and thank everyone for your wonderful and warm replies to this piece, as each and every one means the world to me. After losing 3 weeks of work due to vacation and illness, my time is simply too limited at the moment, to respond to everyone individually, but please know that you elevated my spirits tremendously with your beautiful replies. I can't thank you enough, as I was having a very difficult time finding the light at the end of the tunnel. Thank you for helping me see it … you are truly a wonderful group of friends, who never cease to amaze me with your warmth and caring. I am very grateful to you all. Much appreciation and big hugs to all /Kit |
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msflame Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 188 |
I'm entirely impressed! |
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