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0 posted 2002-05-18 09:01 AM



Her Seven Veils

He wondered how she might step at all
With so many veils that trimmed her tall;
Yet shift with grace she seemed to do
As she sauntered into view

Now its been said that some veils hold
A treasure behind their silks of gold
And some scant veils are little more
Than entry ways men would murder for

It seems a challenge hides behind veils
Nuances of how a person’s mind sails
Each veil a layer beyond whom we would know
And this is what intrigued the stranger so.

He looked through her to see which veil
He might discard before she paled
Borneo green veiled her eyes
So first her trust he would realize

He spoke to her then, soft, and low
She leaned a bit forward, his words to know
Then a flick undraped her Neptune ice blue
The ground felt the silk, but still more to do

Tibetan sun red flamed about her face
She turned quickly yet her wrist he embraced
For he would look past her soiled deeds
Finding truth through the honesty of her needs

She tried to escape, hide behind her Black veils
She needed no man to tip her scales
But with gentlest touch he reached in kind
Slowly removing terror from her mind

Treasured gold silk hung around her sleeve
As he extracted bits o’er which she grieved
For he would know the sheer depth of her
As she clung to this veil ever sure

He enticed her to come to join his walk
He touched no more, he merely talked
The woods would hold their whispers close
The next move would be one she chose

She turned to him and the Borneo green
Veiled again her eyes, or so it seemed
He gasped and saw that the Neptune ice blue
Veil had come back into full view

He wondered if the Tibetan sun red
Would again enflame around her head
Then she turned, and sat upon the grass
Whispering, “Come, I’ll share my past.”

So beneath the trees they lingered there
She such a vision, he would not dare
To interject but a breath, or two
As she spoke softly, he felt night’s dew.

Her words were of the silks she wore
Of the veils that covered her, and more
She allowed that her very depths would show
For a pale ivory veil glistened just so

Time slow passed, she had spent her words
On this man’s heart so that he heard
More than all the veils could hide,
And still, he remained there by her side.

Then time stood still, she spoke no more words
Yet around her shape, her veils, reassured,
Had drifted from her lithe, lean form
Till but one veil left to keep her warm.

    

Draped round her soul, this veil seemed aching
Deep iris sheltered a soul from breaking
She seemed beggared by lost chance of fate
She waited for something, was he too late?

‘Tis said that purple is the color royal
Here her silk shifted, her last veil loyal
For he would not remove from her
All that held her fragility sure

Although he could not help but feel
The satin behind her veil surreal
He reached out his hand, to know her skin
Then she was gone, and the air was thin.

Now over his mind, his own heart aching
He knew why her shimmer had left him quaking
If one more time he could capture a dream,
He would wish to see eyes of Borneo green




[This message has been edited by Sunshine (05-18-2002 03:23 PM).]

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2002-05-18 09:07 AM


The epic romance unveiled in your words of golden silks. ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-05-18 09:08 AM


Sunshine,
This is a keeper, wonderful idea and presentation. Love Sy

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3 posted 2002-05-18 09:14 AM


Sunshine....this has so much within,  so many
thoughts come to mind...

The lady,  unsure of him,  of herserlf...
afraid to reveal...yet finding....over time
and trust....she could reveal....and was
still treasured by him....even though he
knew more of her....things she hid from view
and was afraid to share...

Am I close?   Beautiful poem...very much so..

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4 posted 2002-05-18 09:21 AM


My, oh my, Karilea!
I have have read this twice now
and I'm headed back for yet another read
before I pop it into my library.
This is a treasure indeed...
You capture the reader in the opening stanza...
knowing full well they will not want to
let go until the story has been told.
Even now the visions still dance in my mind.
Magnificent & Enchanting.
~Morning Hugs~

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5 posted 2002-05-18 10:15 AM




BRAVO!!! Oh Sunshine, this is one of my favorites of yours to date, sweet friend, I'm adding this to my library now! (sigh) I too saw this as some story of secrecy that she hides from him and the failure to comply all her troubles publicly with the lack of courage and loss of words! (big hugggsssss) I was curious reading this if each of the veils represent some kind of emotion or trait, like indigo betrayal or along that line. This is absolutely breathtaking, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2002-05-18 10:20 AM


Karilea, this had such extensive presentation.  It reaches into so many areas.
Very well done dear Sunny One!!

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)


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7 posted 2002-05-18 01:40 PM


K, this is some very clever and unique writing...
orignal and fresh.., written on a theme we dont see over done in poetry..
the rhyme and imagery are poetry in motion but the thing that left the impress on me was the employ of the theme of the 7 veils and the use of the colors to create this.
Very cool....Id love to know where you got the inspire for this...if thy muse cares to share.

How long can a girl be haunted by you ...
Soon I'll grow up and I wont even flinch at your name.

Alanis Morissette

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8 posted 2002-05-18 01:52 PM


WOW....Amazing


Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

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9 posted 2002-05-18 02:06 PM


Beautifully written Karilea ... a romance, descriptively penned through the colorful veil of your words. Just lovely.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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10 posted 2002-05-18 03:53 PM


Now you see what a little picture does?  Your poem is absolutely beautiful by the way, a keeper and a "printer" (my new term for it going into the book here, but I tell you, the picture was like the cherry on the top of the best darn chocolate sundae I have seen in a long time. (big grins here)

        
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11 posted 2002-05-18 04:20 PM


Tis said that purple is the color royal
Here her silk shifted, her last veil loyal
For he would not remove from her
All that held her fragility sure

The word "masterpiece" comes to mind here, Karilea...and I agree with Sharon about the photo...it definitely adds to the poem...which is actually more than strong enough to stand on its own....
but the photo...is the icing on the cake!
Did you take that photo, Karilea?
Its exotically beautiful....
hmmm......or is that a photo of you?

~satin veiled hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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12 posted 2002-05-18 05:20 PM


Very nice writing...James
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13 posted 2002-05-18 06:49 PM


Auntie Kari this is lovely, really excellent movement within the poem, its flow through the colours was superb. Since you didn’t use the words I’ve taken them back and turned them into one of my own. However I can see why you didn’t need my assistance this is breathtaking in its entirity well written and beautifully presented

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

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at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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14 posted 2002-05-18 07:03 PM


Oh, Sunshine, this is wonderful!  I think each of us has some of both characters in us.  What a wonderful story, and even more wonderful in a poem!  Thank you.
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15 posted 2002-05-18 07:49 PM


This writing is as delicate as the veils that covered her. Beautiful, sunshiny one

I met a girl with seven veils
And used a line that never fails.
I tried to make her mine and yet
I only got a veiled threat!

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16 posted 2002-05-18 09:44 PM


Karilea

This is wonderous, all!! Fantastic and enchanting poetry, my friend.

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17 posted 2002-05-19 07:50 AM


Kari,
you have painted a masterpeice of words. This is a keeper for sure.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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18 posted 2002-05-20 09:17 AM


This delicate masterpiece enchanted me from first word to last... it's absolutely superb! *S*
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19 posted 2002-05-20 09:56 AM



Thank you, my fine poet friends.  Marsha threw me an idea I could not resist, and I do believe that for me, it's a Keeper!

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20 posted 2002-05-20 09:51 PM


ms sunshine
there is much eros in veils
and how they are danced

very much enjoyed lady

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