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The Scars
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The Scars |
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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
The Scars (inspired by Oceanus's "Memories") The cold of Winter deep within E'en on hot Summer's days Prevents me from pursuing love Since One's light left my gaze Though this One has returned to me The scars--they still remain From eye to chin wet ice melts hard A wound my eyes retain In light of this the months have gone And laughter has returned That One and I did rise again From ashes where we burned But still I creep with cautious pride Afraid my scars will show For though my peace returned to me It shines a harsher glow [This message has been edited by elfin_tigress (05-18-2002 12:28 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank goodness you were inspired... an excellent read! |
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Casanova Junior Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 48Mays Landing NJ |
Elfin, Great post, and since I Have not yet welcomend you to pip. WELCOME! your going to love it here! -Cas |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) This is so sad but powerful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope now your scars have been mended by new renewed hope and love! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
I changed the title of this twice. The first time was because "The Scars" made it sound violent. But I prefer it over my second choice, because it sounded too dramatic and weepy. So it remains "The Scars." Thanks for your responses to my poems, everyone! [This message has been edited by elfin_tigress (05-18-2002 12:31 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
It is hard to understand the depth of our hurts and how it will affect future relationships and actions...James |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Personally, I like the title....it draws one to the poem...at least it does me... This is a well crafted piece of fine art.. Don't tease yourself... You have well expressed the feelings of once being burned, thrice learned!!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"But still I creep with cautious pride Afraid my scars will show For though my peace returned to me It shines a harsher glow" Wow, that's some great stinging imagery. Welcome to Passions! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
elfin_tigress, your poetry shines like that sun and the piece is seamless, no scars at all. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I truly am enjoying your work, and here again another I very much enjoyed and kept. |
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