Open Poetry #20 |
Dedicated to My Truest Friend |
elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
VERY IMPORTANT NOTE FROM THE AUTHOR: This is a bit of a tricky one to read, so if you aren't up to a challenge, you shouldn't read it. It's a style that I've experimented with and it is very very difficult to write. It can be read both horizontally (left to right, as normal), and it can be read vertically. Each word is part of a column and should be read only once. Read it horizontally first. Reading it vertically takes a lot of work because of all the symbols I throw in. When you read it horizontally, ignore all punctuation other than commas, exclamation points, question marks and periods. Vertically, those are not important. / means when you read it vertically, the two words on either side are in the same column and should be read one after the other. -/- means that the words are not only to be read together vertically, but they are to switch places, so the right-hand one is read before the left-hand one. * beside a word means that it is the end of a vertical thought. Parenthesis ( ) means that whatever is in that needs to be omitted when read vertically. Now that I've thoroughly confused you, here's the poem: I now see-/-you back away/from me. Heart- ache becomes no one, nothing*./You endure, though I every thing mess make, and I know* insanity* flows in my poetry*. Don't ask why. Into my heart, I know. How does it*/it(s) own* beat* give? How* wonderous* it* is for you to save our friendship now! I give you my thanks for coming back to my life*. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Elphin T this is absolutely stunning poetry, beautiful it flows with wonder across the page, illuming and brightening the spirit. Truly outstanding writing. You are a fabulous writer, your use of language and form are divine. I love this utterly utterly love it. Perfect poetry of the heart and soul This positive sings in my soul excellent writing your pen is really magic The form of both is very good, I think I’d find it too hard to write but you have done an excellent job. Very well executed. I shall look for Love and warm stuff As always Slushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I just love this creative poetic form you've developed, sweet friend, I love it, this is fabulous! (big hugggssssss) You always amaze me with the fabulous words you write, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
This is really cool.... : ) had to read it a couple of times to get the groove of it.... enjoyed ~~ Connie ~~ |
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