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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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draw me out of: names that don’t matter on long winter nights the warmth from your hands all I need if you're ‘here’ when I return to ‘earth’ you would know water, echo’s of everything you can not see how I can be beautiful -- or; how gentle my eyes yield your abandonment a surviving view-- balanced on shoulders well traveled alone, I am falling empty, naked with interest-- avowed by sound I remember: guilt -- walls that have no end-- -- layers of ashes-- slates of blue clouds sweeping the dusty earth across my skin I tremble in anticipation, the next color return only when you desire the shade of my heart and maybe you will remember the softness of my mouth I would rather have one breath of his hair, one kiss of his mouth, one touch of his hand than an eternity without it. [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-17-2002 06:34 PM).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
What a write! I don't know just how to take it right now ... maybe after a couple of more readings my poor, bent mind will comprehend your meaning  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
How do you write so well? there's so many choice phrases here, it's like a meal followed by another followed by another. I'm stuffed, but I still want more. Stop killing me. Please?  She said burn ... together. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lauren darling girl this is utterly utterly wonderful. This flows with the smoothness of water. It is flowing over my soul in a torrent of wonder. Beautiful writing darling heart utterly utterly beautiful. You really do paint with magic you know You do know I absolutely love this don’t you? Of course you do. As always darling girl this is utterly utterly perfect    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
dangerous, i'm telling ya, dangerous. soft, warm, always. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
walking that line are we?? you do it so well. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I remember: guilt -- walls that have no end-- -- layers of ashes-- slates of blue So beautifully descriptive, Lauren....I just love that. Guilt...walls that have no end...oh how true how true  ~not guilty hugsLyra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"return only when you desire the shade of my heart and maybe you will remember the softness of my mouth"  (sigh) This is soooooo beautifully bittersweet, sweet friend, I hope you have found your true love that has reached into the depths of your heart and honored all the colors you bring him! (kiss on cheek) This is fabulous, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Interloper~  thank you sir~~ bsquirrel~ Inspiration....we wouldnt want you togo hungry would we?? (wink) thank you for your gracious reply.... ~~ Marsha~ Thank you ever so much...apprecaite your thoughts..~ ~~ Christopher~  hugsss and thank you....Always... ~~ Sven~ as of lately yes....as long as the line doesnt break, I am safe...hugss to you... ~~ Lyra~ Thank you sweet lady, and have I told you its SO good to see you here!! I hope you are feeling better....keeping you in prayers.... Peaceful hugsss.. ~~ Sweet Noah~ I really appreciate you....you have a way of making me smile thank you friend....hugssss... I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, you are really getting into this soft and sensual poetry with a vengeance... Another superb one... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Sheerly exquisite~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Draw on... this is a charming read, Lauren, and as always, I am so pleased to find time to read talent such as yours... |
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