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Oh, Carrie
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Oh, Carrie |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Oh, Carrie ©2002 C.G. Ward dream and I remember, recall – attempting to dance Thunder at the peak of conviction, as if monogamy were a battlefield, and time could only endure though the intervention of heathen rituals - all, as old as the clarity of our misconceptions. drift so we practiced homage to Chance; reciting parables of our former lives and deliberating around the concept of a promise I wouldn’t make… even while pretending to ignore that tomorrow would be nothing more than a false rendition of another yesterday. fade away it is later, when grief is born and fate bends hope into Regression, that common interpretations are muted until they resemble the farce of love buried in a diamond and gold promise; a circle of intention, that's broken when life returns from its orbit around the black hole of infidelity. die [This message has been edited by Christopher (05-17-2002 03:13 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Christopher, I'm rather fond of the false renditions of yesterday, they give tomorrows permanency Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Christopher~ The tomorrow of this could be an endless journey...I will just say I understand....  hugsss many Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
... ~huggles C~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
makes one think... enjoyed reading! ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
sigh, hon... BOL |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
thanks y'all, and  so you know - this didn't hurt (well, it did a little but not much) it's the muse that returns again and again, because i became so familiar with it after such an extended stay in the past. i can write these with a smile now. so smile, and repeat after me - "catharsis is good."  C |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
oh - and an extension - this was my attempt at removing extraneous adjectives for Linda's challenge... it was HARD! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Knowing the past behind these lines, I also know how wonderful it is to see you finally express the sorrow rather than holding it inside. Yes, catharsis is a very good thing dear friend...wash it al away, then get on with other things Catharsis: Purification or purgation of emotions primarily through art ~Webster Catharsis Words inked onto paper in rhythm and rhyme cleansing my soul with every line bled from my heart they pour from my fingers washing you away ‘till all that lingers are words [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (05-17-2002 03:54 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This poem suits your picture very well... and was a real heart-tugger... |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Hmm ... not bad  What I find interesting is that the italicised words seem a bit disconnected ... the poem stands quite well without them. I'm sure it wasn't that hard ... ~moi |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hi Chris, And yes, catharsis is good. I think you did a great job as I have seen your discucssion on adjectives before, and you done good |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Muy excellente, sir. I found it interesting, absorbing, and finely done. I like the way it is laid out, and though yes, it could stand alone without the italicized words between, I like them. It feels like having something to hold onto. Hmmm.. does that make sense? ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Again, thank you all for your time and consideration... Linda - you have to find SOMETHING wrong, don't you?  |
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