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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Deaf Eyes Tick tock timebomb, rotting from the inside out, I'm the one they all blame when their jigsaw life refuses to fit. I am no swan blossomed time of dandelion metamorphic rose, I am never tasted by the moment when the rain runs it's lips across my furrowed brow of youth. And everybody knows that there's no consolation prize for last place. Intangible screams hang themselves from teardrop earrings, dangling still heart, pewter by sorrow suckle skin. I believe so much I've stopped hoping, I plead so much knees bleed insane stones. Though there's always light at the end of the dark, I've passed that point long ago that even my scars have scars and eyes are blind echoed of prayers inaudible. But, don't worry, my friend, it's alright, I'll go on heaving a smile, and you'll never see the sound that I was dead before I cried. By Melissa P. Monette [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (05-16-2002 12:18 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (BIG HUGGGSSSSSSSS) Oh Melissa, this brought teats to my eyes reading this, sweet friend, my heart cries out to your pain, but yes, leave it all behind you and let it be deaf to the path ahead, for you have much to look forward too and there is deaf while here is 20/20! (kiss on cheek) This is powerful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
wow this was powerfully strong. I loved the line about you going on 'heaving a smile' and this bit: that even my scars have scars and eyes are blind echoed of prayers inaudible. excellenty written. This is going to my library. -tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
But, don't worry, my friend, it's alright, I'll go on heaving a smile, and you'll never see the sound that I was dead before I cried. I love this poem, Honeybee...its so deep and can have so many different meanings  ~lots of hugsLyra |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Mellibee, your metaphors are showing  beautifully! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
oh yeah... damn I like this set of dishes well done mel'ss |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Melissa, This is full of power and raw emotions. Hope you are ok, and this is just some powerful writing going on. Hugs, Deb |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am no swan blossomed time of dandelion metamorphic rose, ================================ I plead so much knees bleed insane stones. =============================== Ya got some clever, unique and powerful images here Melis...love the words play and metaphor as well. Keep exploring these themes and metaphors... you keep finding new ways to define your poetry. well done girlie.  How long can a girl be haunted by you ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You have so many good lines I couldn't pick one out. A depressingly good write. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah Melybee...how you write... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
A sadly powerful write  You are SO good |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Melissa, you are SO good! This is a very powerful and profound write. Excellent! ~hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I gotta say, as bad a mood as yr in right now, it's gotten y' to write a great diatribe of angst! I love the thing about metamorphic roses and teardrop earrings. She said burn ... together. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . let it flow. . . I like the images here. . . they make you stop and look at them a second time. . . even when you don't want to. . . excellent work. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you all...your support and praise means the world to me, and, it seems that all my muse wants to write these days are darker poems. But, I do thank you for being patient with my melancholy and for understanding that I'm addicted to highly exaggerated themes, images and metaphors. I'm just trying to better myself as a poet "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound...or a smiling mouth" ~Kahlil Gibran~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (05-17-2002 12:25 AM).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
...and bettering yourself you are doing. If dark poetry is what brings the feelings out, by all means stick with it. I know inside you are a bubbly, happy-go-lucky kid waiting for Tarzan to appear |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...this one weeps of its own with sadness. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Honeybee, The intelligence of this piece made me smile. (and it wasn't heaved) Mike |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God, how sad! I enjoyed the read. |
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