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tornapart
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0 posted 2002-05-15 09:28 AM


I wonder, if I lie inside you spread my hands and feet
Taking over your very being, ever so slowly
So that it’s me and not you any more, covering every inch
My soul and yer body
Would I be able to see the world like u see it?
When I have been longing for it.
And if I touch the things around u, your hands, my wishes
Will I be able to feel like u do? Touch the way u do
Through yer eyes will the colors of the world become brighter
Will darkness die down if I share yer light with u?
Will I be able to hear the things u do?
That soft melodious music that u talk about and I fail to hear
When all i hear is deafening silence and threats of death
And I wonder if lie inside ya, will u notice me (for once)
Will I know whats inside yer mind?
Would I be able to talk the way u do
To weave around this magic u so often do
Will I be able to control u? To make you know me
Making u bend at my every whim, every need
If I lie inside and so close to your heart
Will the sweet blood flow inside my veins too
Will I become as wonderful and as cruel?
Will yer beauty reflect in me?
Will u be able to understand my truths?
If I lie inside u
Will u finally say those things not said?
The words that I so want to hear
Will I be able to make u speak?
Your thoughts and mine together, learning each other
Will heaven be found and will hell ever burn away in its own fire
So close to you as close as I can get
Will u teach me your games?
The secrets that u have
Will I be able to know and understand?
And still fight for u, making you fight for me
I wonder….
If I lie inside u.
But the question is… will you  EVER take me in?


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-05-15 09:33 AM



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2 posted 2002-05-15 09:35 AM


Welcome to Passions!   Thoroughly enjoyed your first post!! Bravo! Chris

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3 posted 2002-05-15 09:53 AM


Welcome to the family!!! I would really like to see you spelled out in this instead of the 'internet' version u. Otherwise it's a grand entrance.
Tiersdin
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4 posted 2002-05-15 09:53 AM


This is beautiful!

Welcome to Passions!

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

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5 posted 2002-05-15 01:22 PM


Welcome. I'm with DeVine on the you vs u business. I found it a distraction. Interesting thoughts here, as to whether or not you could somehow 'control' the other person's interactions with the real you if you indeed took over his/her body.
Welcome to these forums.

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6 posted 2002-05-15 01:25 PM


Ha! Obviously these fellow forum members have never listened to Prince! I really, really liked this. U do what u want. B true 2 yrself. (okay THAT's annoying -- but I ain't Prince)

Loved this. Hope t' see more.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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7 posted 2002-05-15 01:49 PM


welcome to poetry land. I just know you will love it around here, there are so many good poems to read and get inspired by
enjoy

Enchantress
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8 posted 2002-05-15 02:08 PM


Welcome To Passions!
Very interesting first post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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