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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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morning is a bowl of orange Jell-O sun on table cloth of blue sky day sinks down in ocean quilt of green with white wave patches dried on line with salt air breezes I watch you there on horizon you are girl woman small with tall woman shadows that touch my hands and eyes you cover sand with your shade we put our shapes on together like soft dark shirts with out buttons they hang around our shoulders and cover our one love fitting we are black stone under dark trees then evening is a bowl of orange Jell-O sun on wrinkle blanket sand night reclines on an ocean quilt of shimmer with emerald wave patches dried flat on sea air bed we are day memories touching sigh sky ©Dark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Amazing images! Love the shadow blend in the day dream effect! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssss) Awwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I just love the dawn to dusk sequence you used and how loves afterglow is symbolic to the sun soaked into the beach sands! (smiles) This is soooo lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Those were the words I was looking for... I am so glad someone clever found them... and used them so very well... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger I am overwhelmed by the simplicity. Enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dark~ You make it sound so dreamy... wish I were there. ~Morning Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I watch you there on horizon you are girl woman small with tall woman shadows Dark - this poem is so full of beautiful pictures, it makes me dizzy with delight. Going into my library! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ethome, thank you for your visit and comments Noah my friend, thank you so much Sunshine, good morning lady of dawn, thank you for your touch Sy, thank you sir, I appreciate your visits Enchantress, always I enjoy your whispers Chris, bless you sweet touch of woman, thanks |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
morning is a bowl of orange Jell-O sun on table cloth of blue sky day sinks down in ocean quilt of green with white wave patches dried on line with salt air breezes I watch you there on horizon you are girl woman small with tall woman shadows that touch my hands and eyes you cover sand with your shade ================================= the jello analogies and imagery of this is brilliant...the sensual expression is as always, breathtaking. you are girl woman small with tall woman shadows that line is cooler that even I know. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS This is a pleasure to read...like dessert before breakfast..a treasure of color and texture. Delicious! mmmmmmmmm |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
janet marie, thanks babe, so sweet of you to touch here ms martie, slow hugs lady friend, I appreicate you muchly |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Your words are like slow undressing and melting into the caress of an ocean in the middle of the Mojave...day dreams indeed.. Sincerely, Reg |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
DS darling boy you know I love this utterly darling boy don’t you? Sometimes the images you paint with your amazing words slip into the place within where shadows dream of being free. Sometimes the thought you stir lifts me into the imaginable place between dream and tomorrow’s song. I’m sure it happens with you more than any other writer. This is stunning writing pure wonder thank you for this memory’s gift I love it utterly utterly love it   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"morning is a bowl of orange Jell-o sun" That line is so cool! DS, the imagery in this is amazing, I love everything about it. You are a gifted poet, indeed. I'm saving this one~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Regina, come to my mojave let my sun burn you let me fan your sighs after thank you babe marsha, you are a whisper to the ear of alone with your woman touch thank you mel'ss thank you lady for the sweet feathers you float over my offerings |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Oceanic daydreams, my favorite kind. Cor |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Cor, thank you ms, mine too |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I loved the imagery and the transition in your work. Excellent write! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
it is simply beautiful primitive lyrical magic... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
interloper, humble thanks for your read goldsparks, thank you for your review, much appreciated and welcome to passions |
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