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the dreams of God... (challenge again, for "Ronnie Baby")
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the dreams of God... (challenge again, for "Ronnie Baby") |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I slept...I saw the dreams of God I wept in awe-- silent applause... Sanctuary'd Holy ground-- a silent guide spoke word profound. shelves and shelves of stories stood on planks of light on feet of wood whispering regret of "should" they beckoned me-- a poor man's food. I reached for book to be my wine, and as I reached I noticed spine-- these books were meant to stay on shelf. Inside the titles? Presence dwelled. Each story was a journey'd soul. Each book, mythology of old... I tried to pull a book to read-- the effort interjected ME into the spell of book in bind. I let them be. I left me blind. Each spine of book a colored dot that colored pictures I'd forgot. From the floor unto the top-- a picture much too big to stop... I knew I could not understand the beauty of an Art so grand. So I just write silently this book that is eternity. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Serenity, this is so well written!!!!!  "shelves and shelves of stories stood on planks of light on feet of wood" Some stories told so far and wide Some are shelved in shelves so high Each life is a story, and you've just added another wonderful page to your book.  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Holy craddazaddaladda! (dat mean it good) Signed, mister insomnamaniac. She said burn ... together. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I reached for book to be my wine, and as I reached I noticed spine-- these books were meant to stay on shelf. Inside the titles? Presence dwelled. Each story was a journey'd soul. Each book, mythology of old... I tried to pull a book to read-- the effort interjected ME into the spell of book in bind. I let them be. I left me blind. ============================= What Mike said...times 10  you are so cool...love this me twin... another very cool metaphor and theme employ here...and the rhymes make me say... AHHHHHHHH ... like a glass of fine wine  When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, What JM said and an extra wonderful from me.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity darling girl again your writing is outstandingly beautiful in its form it’s utterly utterly breathtaking in its beauty. Your heart truly speaks of wonder in this, I love it utterly utterly. Sometimes I swear you write with starlight, this is one of those times Perfect darling heart utterly utterly perfect. And yes I love it utterly As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I know "awesome" is a word overused...but still, it just FITS so well.... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow. This is incredible Karen! Just incredible.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
What more appropriate words could be said than these....I am at a loss for more... |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
but i'm not, magnus  your imagery is very vivid here, and it carries a deeply hidden but haunting melancholy behind it. this is really well written, even more so than your usual (which is already quite impressive.) bravo! -Dave |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen Can I say...IWIHDT Vivid capture of a place I think is. A special dream, and poem. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You're so deep I can't get all the way down there but I love the way you wrote this!! THanks Celeste! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Beyond beautiful. Masterfully done! My library just received a new treaure. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Much gratitude...and this was inspired by one of those startling dreams--it's stayed with me, and I wish I could have it again. But the scene reminded me a bit of Passions, with every poet a book unto themselves--so I wrote this one for Ron...and for all of you, for sharing so graciously your talent and stories. so...THANKS FORUM! It's a special place of dreams here. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms serene enjoyed the view through the window as you danced this song |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sleep may elude you all too often... but when you dream... WOWSER!!! *S* This is superb, serenity... I greatly enjoyed! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
THIS is incredible... and I am speechless! ~Hugs~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*Bows silently in awe* Incredible work this one is Yes!Well done |
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