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Within These Walls
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Within These Walls |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Within These Walls The word of “TERROR” now has been engraved into my eyes Witness to those going where degradation is the prize I am trapped in a religion in a place beyond the gate Where my loved ones now reside inside the temples of their fate I am prisoner of insanity whose message loudly falls On the ears of my indignity inside these closet walls In the darkness of a haven where my soul is raped of worth And my body weak and yearning for the fruits upon the earth I’ve been told of darker places where a number is your name In a naked line of souls, annihilation is the game Now the pain of separation seems more tragic than my death And I breath humiliation’s scent, with every living breath I am fed some meager scraps each day upon a wooden plate By a person who has truly lived the meaning of his faith If I live to see the end of war.- This most horrific time Which will leave the darkest mark upon the conscience of mankind I will live my life forever in the bleakness of this hour For my family was taken with no warning and no power I will scroll the face of sorrow on the pages of all time For the millions who were lost within contortions of a mind Elizabeth Santos |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Elizabeth, this about broke my heart just thinking of all the families who becoe detached from each other in war and crisis, sweet friend, my heart goes out to them and while I feel the pain may always be with them that somehow they can endure the pain and move on and reunite with their loved ones! (sad sigh) This is sadly powerful, sweet friend, my thoughts are with you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I know not what has inspired you, but your writing has touched a deep spot in my heart for all the pain that has been placed on beings from the "contortions of a mind" I have followed your writings and the plight of your illness. Kind lady you have brought tears as well as laughter into my home. Hardly a day goes by that my husband doesn't remark, "You have to hear what Liz wrote today." Thank you for sharing your mind with us. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is a stark, hard, fast paced piece that screams "Holocaust" at me... You don't know your power with the Pen, Elizabeth. It is time you were published. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you so much, Noah. I'm glad this piece touched your heart inot2B, YOu have no idea how much your comments mean to me. I thank you and your huband for reading my poems and allowing me to know how they have touched you. Thank you for your very kind comment Sunshine, Thanks so much for your encouragement, but , dear, nobody would publish my poems. Your thoughts are very sweet And so are you! Hugs, liz |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is very powerful, and I must say, the dark intensity caught me offguard Liz...I love the bold statement of injustice rendered here, and like karilea, I felt the punch of holocaust. You just amazed me all over again. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
The last stanza was my personal favorite of this powerfully written and most enjoyable poem. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"nobody would publish my poems". . . they would be foolish not to. . . for you are indeed a master of the craft. . . well done my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Even in darkness, you spread yr wings. She said burn ... together. |
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