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David2
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since 2000-03-22

Posts 407

0 posted 2002-05-07 03:52 PM

Choose Well

At times my love, you seem a world away,
So distant, so aloof, so self contained,
As if in keeping wanting arms at bay
A sterile sphere of emptiness is gained.
Myself, it seems the paralyzing dread
Of loveless confrontations fueled by spite,
In daylight leaves me less alive than dead
And haunts me through each vacant hour of night.
Plagued as such no love would long survive,
Nor will our own survive without relief.
Relief assured when last our hearts may strive
To overcome the stings of petty grief.

The choice is ours, to love or let love waste,
Then let us love and choose to love in haste.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-05-07 04:42 PM

sigh, you have a grasp of meter, and it plays out well in this sonnet...

I so envy this ability.

um, mind sharing the form of sonnet this might be? and etc.?

(I study, sometimes yanno!)

David2
Member

since 2000-03-22

Posts 407

2 posted 2002-05-07 05:26 PM

Thanks Serenity for your kind words. This is an English sonnet, also known as a Shakespearean sonnet, written in iambic pentameter, that is ten syllables per line with a rhyme scheme of abab,cdcd,efef,gg. It just takes a little practice to think in terms of ten syllables at a time but once you've mastered that these are not too difficult to write. Good luck.
David

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-05-07 06:54 PM

(smiles) Oh David, this is such a breathtaking sonnet, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! (smiles) May you always love like there is no tomorrow and share many happy memories together, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

4 posted 2002-05-07 08:19 PM

Ah yes, time waits for no one, splendid write.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2002-05-07 08:28 PM

I believe some people only let you get so close, no matter how strong and brave they appear to be, somewhere beneath it all they fear themselves to some extent. Love is a many splendored thing, and we all define it differently.

Very nice writing Sir~

emmalouise
Junior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 26

6 posted 2002-05-07 08:42 PM

Though I have loved and cherished each and every one of your beautiful sonnets, this is most definitely, without a doubt, the one that has touched me most deeply. Your heart is a rare one, indeed.....

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