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Open Poetry #20
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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-05-07 02:25 PM

Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe
in sickness.

Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe
in holiness.

Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe
in sadness.

Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe? Please can we writhe
in light.

These vows I now promise you in the graying night.
Among the respite sputter candle fragrance of delight.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-07-2002 02:31 PM).]
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jellybeans
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1 posted 2002-05-07 02:28 PM

nice...nice nice write.....enjoyed, specially how the ending flavored the whole poem
Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-05-07 07:35 PM



(smiles) WOW!!! Ooohhhhhh...I just love the repetition and the closure of this wonderful poem, sweet friend, your versatile style always makes your work a delight to read! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira
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3 posted 2002-05-07 07:45 PM

Mike, I think I could writhe under many circumstances.
Good write!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Martie
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4 posted 2002-05-07 08:01 PM

Smile!
BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2002-05-07 08:14 PM

This was nice and cozy!
bsquirrel
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6 posted 2002-05-08 05:31 PM

Glad you all enjoyed.
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