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The Dreamer's Dance
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The Dreamer's Dance |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
The Dreamer’s Dance ‘Twas but his hand, his to beckon Her to a lighter stance Trusting her right, She would reckon To chance this glorious dance Keeper of all thy angels’ song, Sprinkle thy comfort of night so long Dance around thy dreams desire And seek ye yet thy steady fires, Behold thy stars glow so bright Where steady rocks this private night, Touch me lightly with thine eyes, Then swift upon thy high moon’s rise Stroke those places of deepest need Drop again man’s greatest greed Borrow soul's voice to set in jewels As around thy neck a fine chain tooled ~*~ She dallied and she played away But upon these dreams came sorrow And lonely, oh so lonely still She woke alone upon thy morrow, ~*~ For borrow did she and set in jewels Around her neck, a fine chain, tooled. [This message has been edited by Lady In White (05-07-2002 01:33 PM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lady darling girl again your writing is outstandingly beautiful in its form it’s utterly utterly breathtaking in its beauty. Your heart is truly in this, I love it utterly utterly. Sometimes I swear you write with starlight, this is one of those times. I wonder from whence came these words of finest flow that trickle through this delight with pure wonder. Obviously they came from within a mind of sparkling dreams Absolutely beautiful writing darling I love the growth of you. Perfect darling heart utterly utterly perfect. And yes I love it utterly As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lady, do you have any idea just how lovely this is? It's as delicate as a rose petal and has the same effect upon my senses. It's mine, I'm keeping it.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
can see a message to the earth and the prospectors that dug gold can see a lonly lover can see a river in a dry land much to see there ms whyte..enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Normally, I have a problem with old english. It's very difficult to do well, but this is gorgeous. I liked very much the stand out stanza format too. Effective in leading the mind to "bounce"... and the metaphors make me smile secret smiles. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Stroke those places of deepest need Drop again man’s greatest greed Borrow soul's voice to set in jewels As around thy neck a fine chain tooled Just lovely!!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I just love the classic appeal to this and how these words flow so softly and smooth! (kiss on cheek) This is a true gem, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lady, I am so pleased I popped in this afternoon.. you bring the sunshine to an otherwise dull day! This is perfectly lovely! ~Hugs~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
May I have the next dreamy dance |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady So soft your sultry takes the words to weave into most precious believe. Beautiful! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Keeper of all thy angels song, Sprinkle thy comfort of night so long Dance around thy dreams desire And seek ye yet thy steady fires, Behold thy stars glow so bright Where steady rocks this private night, Touch me lightly with thine eyes, Then swift upon thy high moon's rise ================================ Lady, this is indeed a lovely write... your cadenced tripped the lite fantastic  love the language and imagery of this bittersweet beauty |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
I love the beauty of your thoughts! Shenachie |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ah Lady....a beautiful and very well done write. So glad I could get in to catch it in what lil time I seem to have. Thanks for the great read. Like a red brick, |
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