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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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still rambling, feel free to ignore.  Senseless © 2002 C.G. Ward if we could forego the inconsistencies of modern interpretations - rambling… perhaps I could shave a corner off our ellipses and find myself touching your cheek; distance and waiting banished by the inversion of expectation and insecurities. you: violet, white; struggle and comfort pinned to my sleeve like the charity of daytime interruptions. wait – that was me, never mind. let us delve into the secrets of common knowledge, share the meanderings of peasants – and solve them in a night. centuries undone by a congregation of commonality. or is that too cliché? see, I woke up. I want to say it was this morning, but the reality is nowhere near as bright as truth of a three year imprisonment. what a great idea for our story. too bad it didn’t stay for breakfast. instead, the demon Dream chased time through a maze of petty interpretations, modern – in the inconsistency of letters spilt onto page one of a book about sex. not pictures. no, just examples of smiling in the eaves while I bow from the balcony to… you: violent/white – an analogy of what? oh. was that a mistake… or did truth run rampage over the resuscitation of involvement? one million words can’t be wrong. unless, of course, the sentiment makes no sense. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Makes perfect sense and no sense at all. btw...I dropped the 's'. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
think I'll just ignore ya.   more of your writing that makes my brain do some amazing things...like thinking! enjoyed How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
let us delve into the secrets of common knowledge, share the meanderings of peasants – and solve them in a night." can that be done?? I really enjoy your ramblings....so glad to see more on the board from you.... this isnt senseless.....keep 'em coming.... Lauren~ I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"still rambling, feel free to ignore" =============== "Sweets ... you couldnt ignore me if you tried" John Bender-to Claire in "Breakfast Club" ==================== "perhaps I could shave a corner off our ellipses and find myself touching your cheek; distance and waiting banished by the inversion of expectation and insecurities. you: violet, white; struggle and comfort pinned to my sleeve like the charity of daytime interruptions. wait - that was me, never mind." "oh. was that a mistake or did truth run rampage over the resuscitation of involvement? one million words cant be wrong. unless, of course, the sentiment makes no sense." ============================= sometimes a write need not make sense to anyone but the author and perhaps whom he is speaking of or to. sometimes the words are so personal that no one need make literal sense...and yet the reader will see themselves in the words...and make their own sense ...taking what they need from it.... do I make sense (nonsense? moth sense?) once again your "rambles" impress. mothyme |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ok, so I have a million and one interpretations...(almost literal heh)... I like this ramble - couldn't possibly ignore it... I've decided I'm devoting an entire night to critiquing your plethora of poetry lol...one night this week is C's poetry night...even your so-called 'bad' ones. Some parts of this...what can I say? Made me smile...made me feel..made me nod and say 'yes.' The whole of it? Well now, that'll be a topic for conversation won't it? Huggles you  K |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
you: violet, white; struggle and comfort you: violent/white – an analogy of what? Hmmm..violet? or violent?..two very different words..in anaolgy to what?..perhaps one brilliant minded poet that has someone very faceted in mind? Assuming (she) is whom you write of..she is someone I like. Then I could be rambling and completely (off) my poetic rocker. But enjoyed this vine of thought. Sincerely, Reg |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
this is really good, i like it. -Dave |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
duncan - good! and i saw that, much better! Jenn - go ahead *sniff* thanks Lauren - anything's possible, right? thank you kind lady. JM - as you proved with your recent post... we can all take what we get from a piece. glad you took something meaningful from this one. K - i want to hear all of them. heh. i get an entire night? ok, honestly, i'm excited about that - though you can ignore the 'bad' ones... they're not really worth your time. huggles back reg - not violet or violent... both. that was intentional, and i really got excited that you caught it. the human mind is lazy, and having seen that phrase initially, it will want to skip over the rest, knowing what it already says. very glad you caught that. the analogy? whatever you want it to be... in the first stanza, i was likening her to the colors violet and white, which symbolized struggle and comfort... the second, likening her to violent and white, trimming them to emotions rather than colors. (white can be an emotion ) and yes, she is someone special, multi-faceted and all complex. thank you for noticing so much.Dave - thanks man. hugs around C |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Hmmm-- wouldn't the bad ones ( if any such do exist ) be the very ones you would want the esteemed Masters wannabee to rip apart? I doubt this would be one of them, it is actually pretty good, for a senseless ramble anyway JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
great write...great rant.......makes perfect sense to me |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
J - well, yes, you have a fairly valid point... uhmm... as long as there's something worth critiquing! Jb - thank you for your commetns, sorry it took me so long to get back to you. Chris |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well, out of the seven I'm 'attacking' this is my favourite in terms of meanings, and thinking.. You want to hear all million and one interpretations eh? Rotf..you would. This poem is like...a patchwork quilt just full of different threads, colours...forming one huge design. The poem really is huge...it's inspired and inspired. I can see you in this, in many ways. It's like...I can see several stories behind every line. This is one poem I want to discuss with you at length one day. My favourite parts (although, this is one of those poems that I find hard to 'divide' but here goes anyway).. There I am hovering with my mouse...and I find I can't divide in terms of lines...but in terms of idea, concept - and meaning. Like this: see, I woke up. I want to say it was this morning, but the reality is nowhere near as bright as truth of a three year imprisonment. Obviously you know how I can respond to that. And this: perhaps I could shave a corner off our ellipses and find myself touching your cheek; distance and waiting banished by the inversion of expectation and insecurities. You must know how I feel that one.. Somethings in here could be taken in different ways, like this: 'what a great idea for our story. too bad it didn’t stay for breakfast' this can read flippant, offhand, humourous...it's endless - and I admire that quality. Yes, I could sit here and puzzle about two lines for days...you fiend! hah. 'not pictures. no, just examples of smiling in the eaves while I bow from the balcony to… you: violent/white – an analogy of what?' And what indeed...hot,cold. Lost, found. Fallen, saved. Loving, holding back. Or, as you say - struggle and comfort. peace, hope...it's endless, what you've done here. let us delve into the secrets of common knowledge, share the meanderings of peasants – and solve them in a night. centuries undone by a congregation of commonality. 'meanderings of peasants' - I want an enlightenment on that one...and I simply love how congregation can mean a throng, or a meeting of ideas... Damn..this is GOOD C...the title itself says a lot - let me ask, did you intentionally create all these multiple meanings, or did they just flow out from you - almost unconciously? I suspect the latter, but I could be (gag) wrong.. This is like my Farseer Trilogy that I rave on and on about...I will keep coming back and finding more and more to say.. K |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
ROFL - gawd I loved this one, Chris. Two Thumbs up, here. And hey, 3 years ain't so bad - I was in one for for 32... Michael |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
It's always interesting to read another's thoughts and feelings and this is no exceptions... Enjoyed! ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
perhaps I could shave a corner off our ellipses and find myself touching your cheek; distance and waiting banished by the inversion of expectation and insecurities. you: violet, white; struggle and comfort pinned to my sleeve like the charity of daytime interruptions. wait – that was me, never mind. Pardon the double dip...just struck me this morning, er...afternoon. Ramble on, I'm just hangin' out here in the passenger seat. |
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