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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Sparkles that caught my eye.. a token to remember you by Semiprecious stones linked through a chain clasped around my wrist binding me mentally calculating the cost of a stolen moment like a piece of fine jewelry displayed inside a showcase tempting my impulsive want affording my needs and desire to indulge myself foolishly.. a fortune spent in the spur of the moment sparkles and catches my eye when I turn to look back and find it still there in all it's brilliancy true to form bedazzling me.... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
BS darling girl again your writing is outstandingly beautiful in its form it’s utterly utterly breathtaking in its beauty. Your heart is truly in this, I love it utterly utterly. Sometimes I swear you write with starlight, this is one of those times Perfect darling heart utterly utterly perfect. And yes I love it utterly As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, It's hard to argue with Mushy! I like the metaphor here a lot.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Marsha~ for mentioning the starlight, it is truly just that, and I am drawn to it even though there are times I would rather not be. Thank you soooo much for your gracious reply. Thank you for being here Larry~ and reading my endless string of metaphors. It means a lot! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Another gem in the treasure chest. I like the flow of this, especially this line: "mentally calculating the cost of a stolen moment" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Nice. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
mentally calculating the cost of a stolen moment Great line. I'd bet the cost is also. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
blues..you hitting the jewelry stores now? damn your mall hopping addiction is getting serious...any word on the lotto? enjoyed you babe |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - I read what you've written and believe I understand the words. Great write, and peace be with you.. BC |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
lori, you always take fairly simple concepts and turn them into wonderful pieces of poetry...this is no exception, your words never cease to amaze me as your wonderful gift never ceases to leave me in complete awe. i loved this! your words are priceless, and like a rare gem my friend. take care. amy "you can't stop |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
mentally calculating the cost of a stolen moment like a piece of fine jewelry displayed inside a showcase I loved this, Lori  ~expensive hugsLyra |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
A poetic offering that could represent so many of the bedazzlers of our eyes..Glistening verse dear poetess! Sincerely, Reg |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Lori, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love the value of your words, may these words of your heart forever be held dear and always be more valuable than diamonds to your love and all your true friends! (kiss on cheek) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Midnitesun~ I'm always so happy to see you here, thanks. Hey Encino Man~ nice is nice and I thank you.Duncan~ The real deal never comes cheap, of course I wouldn't have it any other way! Thank you Duncan~ Dark Stranger~ I am not a mall hopper, I just know what I like and I like what I know!! It was looking pretty good there for a while, but at least I didn't get robbed! Thanks for reading me~ BC~ Thank you for your warm words and escpecially for understanding what I was trying to say here. Amy~ Thank you for thinking so much of what I write. My thoughts tend to get away from me at times, and I've paid dearly when trying to pick up the pieces and hold them together. k sara sara.....It only ends up costing more to keep worrying about it. Hugs to you and thank you always~ Hello Lyra~ I liked those lines too. I guess that pretty much wraps it up! Thank you for reading and I hope life is settling down and you're feeling well again. Warm and gentle hugs to you my friend~ Hi Regina~ Yes, it's easy to be dazzled and wear the sparkle, if only for a little while. Thank you for your lovely reply, and sharing your insight. You're a sweet lady~ Noah~ Again you are hitting the nail on the head, no diamond could replace the jewel in my heart that will never cease to shine. I thank you for knowing and caring enough to read beyond my words. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-07-2002 01:06 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
what value does a stolen moment have... a thought to ponder..I like your thoughts today, Lori..hope you are well hugsss M |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Blues, I have always admired the simplicity in your metaphoric melodies, and this is no exception. Memories can be the greatest of gems in all their brillance. Wonderful work! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Maureen~ You raise a good question, but I suspect we've all stolen a few moments in our day. You make me think too much! Hugs to you too~ Dulci~ It is so nice to see you here. Thank you thank you. I got to thinking about when we were all writing those tankas way back when. That was a great time, and I had so much fun with you. Be well, stay happy!!! |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Those were some fun times, I still miss the Kal ~sigh~ It was my "poetic" home for so long, it was a sad day to see it go! We can still do those Tankas ya know!  Would be a good challenge doncha think? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Diamonds are a girl's best friend!!!!??? And this poem is a gem as well...Nicely done! |
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