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Moment of Clarity and Goodbye
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Moment of Clarity and Goodbye |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Toy boys don’t cry just wind themselves up and walk away without an unkind word or a backward glance the dream was ours but I never had a chance It's okay I would have loved you even if I'd known [This message has been edited by Duncan (05-06-2002 12:17 PM).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Duncan,
I understand that way to well. Once again I can completely connect with your words.  Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
...better to have loved and lost, Duncan? Yep, I agree  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
That's the thing about loving, it goes deeper than what we know, and/or what we knew all along. Damn again!!!  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
whenever i hear the phrase "better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all" (which is exactly what i thought before i even saw Bal's reply) i can't help but think of Tommy Lee Jones' response to Will Smith in Men in Black: "Try it." Not that i disagree with the phrase... i can say from experience that i agree with it - even losing the love, you gain growth. Duncan - liked this. Toyboy was a good start... uhmm... the only thing i'd ask you to change is "backwards." just me, but i prefer these kind of words sans the 's' just sounds... cleaner. Chris |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"The dream was ours but I never had a chance"...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
without an unkind word or a back wards glance the dream was ours but I never had a chance It's okay I would have loved you even if I'd known ============================== "without regret" ... (yktiktyk) on your last post from a couple days ago ...I said you wear your heart on your sleeve with class...you just proved my point for me with this. heart-hugs D. mothyme |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Toy boys don’t cry just wind themselves up and walk away ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dang Duncan! You're gonna make me cry now! ~Monday morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
SOB! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan, That Balladeer always beats me to the line I would use. Good one. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 wow |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sometimes the best toys are put on a shelf, for safekeeping. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
What is unsaid in this is just as powerful as what is said. Thank you. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey Duncan what's up? This is too sad. Write if you want to talk about it. Sandra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Duncan~ Poignant excellence ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Touching and sad. Hugs, lovely write. |
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ambermize Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 157California |
Wonderful poem, been there so many times that I can remember. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you are a wonderful writer this piece eats my heart, makes it bleed apart from outside in, inside out like a pin had stuck myself with it, the yearn and regret and forget of it like a top spinning on its head i am not dead and you are clearly so alive your blood is leaking from the knife you hold within your hand pens can understand the pens of other pens as long as Truth is fanned (you inspired me.... i send you friendship and hugs and admiration for your writing and thank yous for always reading me.... it has meant a great deal.... thank you for letting me tag onto your post......you spontaneously inspired me... so sue me) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Fantastic write and the title is awesome. pssst...my heart is with you in this one... |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Duncan~ You say so much in these ten lines... *hugs* goodbyes are so so very hard. Warm thoughts to you, ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Actually, Duncan...when I was little, I had a doll which cried, but it also wet it's pants LOL  Sorry for the barb, I just couldn't resist. but this is really very sad  but you won't sit on that shelf, un-noticed for too long, Duncan...someone will notice what a sweet guy you are soon. ~weepy hugsLyra |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As I read your work, I respect your clean defined style and open hearted messages. A wonderful attainment and a worthy goal. Shook my heart. ThisDiamond |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So few words... so many responses... Bravo! |
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