Open Poetry #20 |
Senryu - I need a title? |
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Painting lips coral fingers breathe across voice smiles blushed by wanton sigh By Melissa P. Monette |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, your gorgeous senryus always flow with such heavenly fantasy imagery and romance! (kiss on cheek) I think a pretty title would be "Abyss Blushes"! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I agree with Noah 100%! Very very pretty...I can't think of any titles at the moment but if one pops into my head I will get back to ya! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Beautifully done. Maybe call it "Wanton Sighs?" |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Missy, Sounds like an "Oral Makover" to me! It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
The Adorning Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
*BUMP* |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you everyone for reading and for your title suggestions! There's 2 titles that I really like, and I'll let you know when and if I decide okay?! For some reason I just couldn't think of a title with enough oomph, so your help is much appreciated. And Larry - aww shucks ain't you the sweeeeeeetest! Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautifully done...might suggest "Wanton Coral Lips".....but that was just my thought. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Fingertip Whispers... loved it ~Victoria |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Melissa, I love this How about "Blush" for a title? That is the hardest part of writing for me, the titles lol. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Love it, Melissa! How about "Wantin' Sighs"? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Don't have a clue for a title but I love the poem! |
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