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Tapping the Window
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Tapping the Window |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Part of the notebook series~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ How I wish for rain again bringing your touch back to my memory a trickle a down pour drops I never knew how lonely felt until parted lips spoke of bending rainbows to fit what ever decision we had placed before time pressing my thoughts to your mind with yellow roses soft, sweet symbols completing how laughing in your tides, with brilliance, & beauty you captured me a photograph, canvas black and white floating in color with emeralds I linger there love that was felt tapping windows of your unforgettable smile when 'we' was feeling one peace how you held my tears when I cried close to heart for all the beautiful feelings when you whispered the ocean will never look the same in our eyes ~Sinking fast into an ocean of you, what if I told you, what if I said that I love you do we dare cross that line between your heart and mine~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-02-2002 10:52 AM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Simply beautiful. To pick a favorite line was difficult, but it would have to be this one... "when 'we' was feeling one" Lauren, you must live near the ocean, as the sea is supposed to be an excellent source for inspiration. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ My god, Lauren ... this is beautiful~ Your words tap gently at the window my heart~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, A lovely beautiful write in fact a delight.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I never knew how lonely felt until parted lips spoke of bending rainbows to fit what ever decision we had placed before time pressing my thoughts to your mind =========================== I know that notebook...its full of mirrors and words that play my heart strings. This is yet another whisper of exquisite from its soul's pages...written on butterlfy wings.   ... and I don't know why ... |
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Raz Member
since 2002-04-30
Posts 51Quebec, Canada |
It's raining here now, and the theme is one I can very easily relate to. Thanks. -Raz |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Steady rain .... steady.  |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Lauren this is awesome, writing at its utter best, you really are an exceptional writer and this is gorgeous   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You know my philosophy: the more rain poems the better. This poem is proof that philosophy is sound.  |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Lauren, Once again, sooooooo pretty We are so lucky to be able to read you Thank you for sharing your talent and words with us.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, I love reading over your shoulder in your notebook. Such imagery and emotion connected to nature are a sure guarantee to melt my heart. Just lovely.  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"how you held my tears when I cried close to heart for all the beautiful feelings when you whispered the ocean will never look the same in our eyes" (smiles) Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always bring a smile to my face, this had me dreaming of meeting my Joanna so much and just imagining how much more beautifully I will see things when her heart is beating against mine, cry ing in joy! (kiss on cheek) This is absolutely breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I have this idea for your first book Lauren. . . just like this. . . the "notebook" series. . . printed on notebook paper. . . in a binder. . . or something like that. . . the simplicity of it would betray the complexity of your words. . . which are excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lauren~ this is so beautiful...i get so wrapped up into your words...they are always a sigh just waiting to happen...beautiful imagery captured in this...wonderful! take care. amy "you can't stop |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Just beautiful! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisite... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
When We was feeling one....love this verse.. Loved all of this..very nice Lauren. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren your words tap upon my soul so softly. Hugs to you sweet lady. Like a red brick, |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Very beautiful, chock full of imagery. Just love the way you dangle your words before our eyes. ***Ivy Rose |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Lovely is not adequate enough - I am in awe. Beautiful writing & expression... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Opeth~ I live 8 blocks from the Ocean, and yes it has remained a constant art of inspiration... ~~ Marge~ as do yours.... thank you for this gentle reply...hugsss~~ SY~ I am so glad you did enjoy....a delight to see your smile.... ~~ Janet Marie~ traced with butterfly smiles, very touching you are...thank you for always being you.... hugsss~~ Raz~ I am so glad you could relate to this....I hope the rain was refreshing.... ~~ Craig~ awww don't shead a nother tear....I like to see you smile....its an addiction ya know....hugssss to you.... ~~ Krissy~ dear one, thank you for stopping by....what a pleasure to see you... ~~ bsquirrel~ I could never get enough of rain, let it pour!! ~~ Tara~ thank you for reading sweet friend...I am so humbled by your tender replies....always...BIG HUGSSSSS ~~ Larry~ well its just a little glimpse....I have many to go through....be well you...peace....hugssss ~~ Noah~ I just adore you....you make writing so worth it dear one...thank you Noah...always...and I hope when you meet joanna in person, you both can spend time on the shores of the sea....and gaze at all its wonderful mystery.... ~~ Sven~ Well in truth, I have thought about it, more then once...I think i might enjoy my words on paper....who knows maybe one day....ty! ~~ Amister~ what a sweet compliment, thank you for peeking in....appreciate that smile...HUGSSS ~~ Martie~ thanks~ HUGSSS ~~ Nancy~ I love that reply....thank you sweet lady...HUGSSS ~~ Barry~ I appreciate you....thank you for your kind words....hugsss ~~ Donna~ miss you and your words....~~ IvyRose~ I do appreciate you stopping in , thank you ever so much for the dangle....( i love that word) ~~ KimW~ lovely is just great....awe makes me smile, as do your words....ty.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Love, Peace to all..... Lauren~ I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings |
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Melodie Morningstarr Junior Member
since 2002-05-09
Posts 16Toronto, ON, Canada |
This is beautiful, so touching, so softly powerful. I've been there and you speakof it so well! |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
this is really beautiful. -dave |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This is so beautifully done lauren..tender and sweet...loved it! hugs ~Victoria |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is such a pretty poem, Lauren... a photograph, canvas black and white floating in color with emeralds I really love it ~lots of hugsLyra |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a lovely feeling is embodied in this one there are some excellent phrases and images it's like a gentle caress being stolen away almost before it can happen, leaving only longing in its wake Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Greeneyes, I am sorry to say that this is the first time that I have read one of your postings, I enjoyed this work of yours so much, filled with expression and feeling, thoughts of remembered tenderness, of loneliness, of togetherness, peace and love; let the rain bring us all memories without the regrets. Enjoyed the read. Sincerely Rick |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This was a very gentle tap, Lauren...I continue to enjoy the growth I see in your writing as the days go by... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you all very much....I continue to be humbled by each reply..... with warm regard.... Lauren~ I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I suppose I'm drawn to your poetry because it's always a blend of romance and nature. You blend them effortlessly, Lauren. *hugs* my friend. Michael |
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