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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-04-30 12:45 PM

You fill yourself with
--intention

thoughts all absorbed with in
efforts to
--speak
of passion,
love in simple terms

The rains
  come
the storm
breaches inner
  feelings
sweeping over slowly,
in outward choices of
gaining pleasure

Open as a touch
flourishing
blooming

A drop of honey
with      intensity
you remember the
smell, the taste,
the falling of soft
songs      memories--

I was held in
specific moments
blissful   --free

unfolded
  petals
of velvet

breathing
your words,

surrender
with out

--escape

~Sinking fast into
an ocean of you,
what if I told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-01-2002 01:58 PM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2002-04-30 01:08 PM

BRAVO! This is a breath of love floating on a breeze. Lauren, you have a magical way of bringing a moment forward.

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

2 posted 2002-04-30 01:13 PM

are you trying to say something here?

very soft, sweet, and tender - much like a certain green-eyed blonde i've seen around here.

Chris

Don't Dream It.
Be It.
-Frank N. Furter

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

3 posted 2002-04-30 01:16 PM

Lauren,
Such a tender heart, expressing such gentle love. I'll always like that.

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

4 posted 2002-04-30 01:16 PM

I know what you are trying to say. The spirit listens.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

5 posted 2002-04-30 02:28 PM

This is beautiful Lauren.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

6 posted 2002-04-30 03:25 PM

inhaling your words
with an intense honesty
heart surrendering

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

7 posted 2002-04-30 03:40 PM

Lauren,

I love your writing so much. I could get lost in your words.

Hugs,
Tara

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2002-04-30 04:07 PM

what Tara said Lauren. . .

this is amazing. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-04-30 04:52 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always shine with such love and bliss! (kiss on cheek) May true love never escape your heart and always embrace you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

10 posted 2002-04-30 06:43 PM

Greeneyes - I do get lost in your words. You write with such feelings.

BC

Silver Streak
Member Elite

since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

11 posted 2002-04-30 06:44 PM

Lovely! Thank you, Lauren.

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

12 posted 2002-04-30 07:22 PM

beautiful write

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2002-04-30 08:13 PM

I'm pondering the meaning of surrendering without escape. Hmmmmm, like no way out, and even if there was, surrendering might be the lesser of two evils??

Just my take Lauren, I think me thinks too much!! You fashion your poems with such a nice touch.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

14 posted 2002-04-30 09:18 PM

My sweet and gentle friend, I love this.

*hugs*

[This message has been edited by Auguste (04-30-2002 09:19 PM).]

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

15 posted 2002-04-30 09:20 PM

This is simply beautiful. Your writing grows every time I read.
Sandra

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

16 posted 2002-05-01 12:26 PM

A drop of honey
with      intensity
you remember the
smell, the taste,
the falling of soft
songs        memories--

I was held in
specific moments
blissful   --free

unfolded
  petals
of velvet

breathing
your words,

surrender
with out

--escape

==============================

*SIGH*

yeah....surrender is a good word

Lauren this is lovely...the words flow and read like a exhale..
and I love the hints of rhyme you spinkle in.
Beautiful write...just like the poet.

... and I don't know why ...
Why should love come down and just sweep me away
I want to fly ... but there are so many things in my way.

J Browne

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

17 posted 2002-05-01 10:28 AM

My outlook would be that of the last lines ....
"surrender with out ... escape"

Leaving whats behind ...
... nothing is really left unless its right.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

18 posted 2002-05-01 02:50 PM

Kacy~

I appreciate your soft reply....hugsss sweet friend

~~

Christopher~

LOL well I am trying...thank you for your tender words....

~~

Larry~

expressions of faith....

~~

MR~

they do sometimes dont they....thanks for peeking in...

~~

Sharon~

hugssss.....thank you

~~

Interloper~

I have always enjoyed your replies...in poetic form....I thank you sir....

~~

Tara~

HUGSSS to you.....appreciate your warmth....

~~

Sven~

kudos dear friend....hugsssss for your reply...

~~

Noah~

hopefully it never will, but I wonder sometimes....your vibrant reply makes me smile....

~~

Bill~

a tender reply, to get lost in as well....thanks friend....

~~

Silver Streak~

Thanks much for peeking in...

~~

bernie~

hi there, enjoyed that smile...

~~

Lori~

actually lori, maybe the escape would be?? I love your way of thinking....HUGSSSSS

~~
Michael~

thank you, always wishing you the best....and keeping you in prayers...

~~

Sandra~

thank you for always reading, and helping me grow.....

~~

Janet Marie~

sweet poetess....I am thankful you are about, leaving your traces of words for hearts to read....luv ya...

~~

Craig~

I agree....soulful hugsssss to you....for your kindness....

Love to you all......Peace

Lauren~

~Sinking fast into
an ocean of you,
what if I told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

19 posted 2002-05-01 11:10 PM

what a surprise, this is another really beautiful poem from you. i always enjoy reading your work.
-Dave

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

20 posted 2002-05-02 02:56 PM

You actually got me to shiver with the word "intensity." Not an easy thing to do. So yeh ... I really felt this one.

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