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The ride to Buffalo Grove
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The ride to Buffalo Grove |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
The sun was low and I was out of beer. We must’ve passed a hundred road signs but not one had caught Jake’s attention. Dallas had fallen asleep about 50 miles back. Since then, we’d ridden along in silence, Jake fooling with the radio now and then but picking up nothing, me staring out the window, counting seconds in my head between mile markers. Finally, feeling too antsy to keep quiet any longer, I asked, ‘Aren’t you gettin’ tired of drivin’ man? I could sure use a break from this seat.’ ‘Yeah’, he drew the word out as he stretched, We’re almost there, not far now.’ I let the words ‘not far now’ settle in my mind a bit, then more from boredom than interest asked, ‘So what are we gonna do with these ghosts when we find ‘em Jake?’ ‘No ghosts kid, just some answers’ he replied without tone, paying most his attention to the map open in front of him and slowing the truck to under twenty. I leaned back against the door of the truck, stretched my legs out much as possible and looked at Dallas, wishin’ I was her pillow. ‘A woman like that sleepin’ on your arm and you still need answers?’ I laughed, not expecting or getting a response. Couple minutes up the road, Jake nodded towards the shoulder, saying ‘There it is.’ An old wooden sign reading ‘Buffalo Grove 3 Miles’ and pointing north stood to the side, almost overgrown by weeds and wildflowers. We made the turn and Jake gently roused Dallas from sleep. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You made this spring to life by the mention of weeds, and wildflowers... good job, Duncan... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I leaned back against the door of the truck, stretched my legs out much as possible and looked at Dallas, wishin’ I was her pillow. ‘A woman like that sleepin’ on your arm and you still need answers?’ I laughed, not expecting or getting a response. ============================ its the little vignette moments like these that make the characters real..make the breathe on the page...and make us want to know more about them. and I had to laugh at Jacskon's antsiness... I could so see the kid fidgeting in his seat... "Are we there yet...are we there yet???" lmao |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan You write well always enjoy reading you. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Duncan, this is wonderful, sweet friend, now I can't wait to see what this excursion will bring to them all, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice installment bud.... now..where you go from here? ( chuckling) nicely done.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yep...thats a poem. lmao  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done Duncan! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
A poem...without pictures! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I LOVE THIS POEM...IM VOTING!!! LMAO |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Way too cool Dunc. You are a trip and a half. Can I hitch a ride one of these days? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Janet Marie...Did you have something you wanted to share with the rest of us? Or have you perhaps.....LOST YOUR MOTHY MIND??? Go play with your own thread... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Kacy...Hitch right up!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Is there a doctor in the forum? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I told the witch doctor I was in love with you... I told the witch doctor you didnt love me true... and then the witch doctor--he told me what to do ... HE SAID............. OOOOOUUUUUU EEEEEEE OOOOOOUUUUU AH AH TING TANG WALLA WALLA BING BANG OOOOOUUUUUU EEEEEEE OOOOOOUUUUU AH AH TING TANG WALLA WALLA BING BAAAAAAAANNNGGG |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey....wheres the little voting box thingy????? LMAO |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 Janet Marie, you are a mess, aren't you? Hey, Duncan, It is good, Sir.... Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thanks Ethel. Ignore JM...she's hoping to get spanked. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This was good, Duncan...but, what's wrong with Janet Marie..you put a hex on her? I haven't thought of that song in years...and now I can't get it out of my mind. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I love your little snippets and the way you accent these stories. Very good telling Dear Duncan~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Falling out of my chair now! LMAO at you JM. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well..I see something here has amused JM... and or Duncan..you have ssaid or done something to her.and she is now... going to haunt all your threads with witch doctor songs and smiley faces... LOL YOU TWO GET SERIOUS..... I want another installment out of both of you this week... no if's ands or but's about it... so straighten up... and get to writing.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I want another installment out of both of you this week... me mothy muse ran off with the witch doctor |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Duncan, Engrossing story/poem. Made me wonder what Dallas looks like. JM, Great song!! Susan |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
hmmm.... where's the next one? slackers.... |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I'd read JMs response before reading this, but this is a wonderful story of people on the road to a destination meaningful to one of them. Very enjoyable. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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