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Eyelash
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Eyelash |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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I rub away the impression that was burnt behind my eyes. An eyelash finds itself at the tip of my ring finger. Just like you, I could destroy it if I wanted to. Hold my eyes shut and think of how she stole a glance from you and never gave it back. Blow it away. Open my eyes force them to see my idea of love floating to florescence. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
The imagery is awesome. I love it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
I enjoyed this poem, very good connections. My favorite line is she stole a glance. The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love another. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible write! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Don't think I've read you before this but I hope to see more. Captured much with few words... Love the concepts. Like the subtle, "at the tip of my ~ring~ finger.... Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Thoughtfully written. I really like this. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely done and much enjoyed! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
the_loner_23, Thank you. I worked at capturing certain images. rkcraig, That's interesting, because this is the third time I've rewritten that piece and the "stole a glance line" is the newest addition. Thanks. passing shadows, Thank you so much. Pat, Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed. No, I haven't been around in awhile, but it's good to be back. That's so cool that you caught those subtle things. Fred, Thanks .Enchantress, Great to hear, glad you enjoyed. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh my gosh, I just love the symbolism in this, sweet friend, eyelashes are so hard to remove from an eye and the impressions can be haunting though you can still always glimpse! (smiles) I happily cast my vote, sweet friend, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, this is a really good poem. I don't think I've read you before, either, but hope to read more in the future. "Love makes the world go around" |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Lovely poem. Well done. Sandra |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Amazing, what depth the blinking away of an eyelash can uncover. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Noah, Thank you so much sweetheart. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. garysgirl, Thanks. I'm sure I'll be around. Sandra, Thank you, dear .Midnitesun, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping in. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Yes indeed! Faboulous images, wonderful portrait painted in 'angelic' form. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Love that last line. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Gosh..something so simple as an eyelash made a big impression on me with your words..good job! |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
JP, Thank you muchly, kind sir. Glad you enjoyed. bsquirrel, This originally started off as just a 3 line poem and that was one of the few that has survived all the drafts. Thanks. PDV, I'm so glad it caught your attention. Thank you so much. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I really like this.....  Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Bridgette, Thank you, sweetie. I'm so glad you do . |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much. *S* Sometimes the smallest of things gives us insight into so much. *S* |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
So beautiful!!! |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
suthern and Brad, Thank you very much for your kind words. I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece. |
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