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KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
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Inside the shadow's shadow

0 posted 2003-02-16 01:50 AM


The distant callings,
Palpitating whispers...

Your touch, the rough skin
That softly stirs
Every nerve
That lies inside
My skin.
The sensual sensation
Errupts inside of me
Like a cluster of
Tiny exploding volcanoes.
The smile that tugs
At my lips
Is covered by your kiss.
Rising, pushing
Pulling, dipping.
Though you've said
Not one word,
The love travels out your heart,
Through your arms,
Out of your hands
That hold my own,
Into my fingers,
Slithering into my head,
Moving slowly, smoothly,
Down my neck, into my heart...
...And suddenly I'm gliding
Through the highest, brightest clouds...
Flying!
Fast past the soaring airplanes,
Eyes forced shut
By the extreme grin
Nestled into my cheeks.
A voice rings out
With a giddy, happy shreek
And I am surprised to hear
The laugh
Echoing in my own throat.
I've found salvation in your love
No concentration.
Pure fascination
Of the levitation
Your love
Has presented
To me...
And then
Your skin...
And we make the journey
Once again...
Your skin is the take-
Off strip
That we become
Airborne from.

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

[This message has been edited by KoKo (02-16-2003 05:52 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Lauren - All Rights Reserved
Albert J. Allie
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 512
Queens NY
1 posted 2003-02-16 02:13 AM


I have got chills traveling in places i didn't know I had.....Oh my!! Wonderful stuff!!!!!!

The smile that tugs
At my lips
Is covered by your kiss.
Rising, pushing
Pulling, dipping.
Though you've said
Not one word,
The love travels out your heart,
Through your arms,
Out of your hands
That hold my own,
Into my fingers,
Slithering into my head,
Moving slowly, smoothly,
Down my neck, into my heart...
...And suddenly I'm gliding
Through the highest, brightest clouds...
Flying!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
2 posted 2003-02-16 03:21 AM


gorgeous write!
KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow
3 posted 2003-02-16 05:33 AM


Thank you both. You guys really are much too kind!!!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2003-02-17 02:43 PM


Ha ha Koko...I know a girl named Koko and she does this to me...a nice sensual ride...James
cinnamongirl
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since 2003-02-02
Posts 217

5 posted 2003-02-17 04:29 PM


Beautiful love, captured well in your words.

Truly a sweet write!!!

Thank you!!

Love,
Moca

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2003-02-17 04:37 PM


Softly sensual...very nicely done.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219
Austin, Tx
7 posted 2003-02-17 04:53 PM


A uplifting write full of the poet's power.
Gentle Spirit
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Posts 13989

8 posted 2003-02-18 10:51 AM


I LOVED this.  Very well done indeed!
Mistletoe Angel
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9 posted 2003-02-18 08:28 PM




(smiles) Yay! Oh my gosh, I just love this, sweet friend, this made me smile as I could imagine you and your love soaring off like an airplane, only in this case a unicorn upon the rainbow to eternity and happiness forever! (big hugggssssss) This is precious, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2003-02-21 01:49 PM


I like the ideas and wordplay here, but check some of your spelling.
garysgirl
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Florida, USA
11 posted 2003-02-21 02:51 PM


KoKo, this is how my Love makes me feel, too, but I just haven't gotten the nerve to write it exactly this way on here, yet....we do write things like this to each other, though. He wants me to put some of them on here, but I just haven't yet.
This was very good...

Ethel....garysgirl

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle
12 posted 2003-02-22 10:02 PM


I got lost in the
acceleration and taken
completely away.
Love it! *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow
13 posted 2003-02-24 12:55 PM


Thank you all very much!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
14 posted 2003-02-25 01:35 PM


Amazing writing ability you have.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.



DawnG
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15 posted 2003-02-25 02:56 PM


Wow! This poem is absolutely wonderful. I truly cannot wait to read it in the book with any luck.

                            Dawn

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow
16 posted 2003-02-26 01:10 AM


Thank you Lost Dreamer and DawnG. You are very, very kind with your words!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
17 posted 2003-03-07 02:47 AM


That much sensation in words has to have my vote  

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (03-07-2003 02:48 AM).]

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
18 posted 2003-03-08 03:59 AM


Ko - KO - it sings nicely - very nice xxoo
passing shadows
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displaced
19 posted 2003-03-08 03:59 AM


whew!
carol
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since 2003-01-25
Posts 624
Florida USA
20 posted 2003-04-22 12:05 PM


Very beautiful nice for a book

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

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