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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
The distant callings, Palpitating whispers... Your touch, the rough skin That softly stirs Every nerve That lies inside My skin. The sensual sensation Errupts inside of me Like a cluster of Tiny exploding volcanoes. The smile that tugs At my lips Is covered by your kiss. Rising, pushing Pulling, dipping. Though you've said Not one word, The love travels out your heart, Through your arms, Out of your hands That hold my own, Into my fingers, Slithering into my head, Moving slowly, smoothly, Down my neck, into my heart... ...And suddenly I'm gliding Through the highest, brightest clouds... Flying! Fast past the soaring airplanes, Eyes forced shut By the extreme grin Nestled into my cheeks. A voice rings out With a giddy, happy shreek And I am surprised to hear The laugh Echoing in my own throat. I've found salvation in your love No concentration. Pure fascination Of the levitation Your love Has presented To me... And then Your skin... And we make the journey Once again... Your skin is the take- Off strip That we become Airborne from. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. --Chang Tzu [This message has been edited by KoKo (02-16-2003 05:52 AM).] |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
I have got chills traveling in places i didn't know I had.....Oh my!! Wonderful stuff!!!!!! The smile that tugs At my lips Is covered by your kiss. Rising, pushing Pulling, dipping. Though you've said Not one word, The love travels out your heart, Through your arms, Out of your hands That hold my own, Into my fingers, Slithering into my head, Moving slowly, smoothly, Down my neck, into my heart... ...And suddenly I'm gliding Through the highest, brightest clouds... Flying! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gorgeous write! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you both. You guys really are much too kind!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Ha ha Koko...I know a girl named Koko and she does this to me...a nice sensual ride...James |
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cinnamongirl Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 217 |
Beautiful love, captured well in your words. Truly a sweet write!!! Thank you!! Love, Moca |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Softly sensual...very nicely done. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
A uplifting write full of the poet's power. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I LOVED this. Very well done indeed! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Oh my gosh, I just love this, sweet friend, this made me smile as I could imagine you and your love soaring off like an airplane, only in this case a unicorn upon the rainbow to eternity and happiness forever! (big hugggssssss) This is precious, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like the ideas and wordplay here, but check some of your spelling. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
KoKo, this is how my Love makes me feel, too, but I just haven't gotten the nerve to write it exactly this way on here, yet....we do write things like this to each other, though. He wants me to put some of them on here, but I just haven't yet. This was very good...  Ethel....garysgirl |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
I got lost in the acceleration and taken completely away. Love it! *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you all very much!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Amazing writing ability you have.  Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Wow! This poem is absolutely wonderful. I truly cannot wait to read it in the book with any luck.  Dawn |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you Lost Dreamer and DawnG. You are very, very kind with your words!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
That much sensation in words has to have my vote [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (03-07-2003 02:48 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ko - KO - it sings nicely - very nice xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
whew! |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Very beautiful nice for a book Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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