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On Cue, Take Two
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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How is it that we come away without words left in the silence underlying the quiet hush of half truths and white lies in fine print written with a smooth pen marked with a period at the end of the line because you say that's where it goes. Since you don't have time to make it flow you erase and white out delete me please so I can start over while you soothe your conscious mind pretending you had no part conveniently forgetting your lines on cue, take two. It's a fools play with copy write rules that reads with lose ends but you knew that already. I always wanted to write a true story mine, not yours since you never let on much. So I'll tighten my version while honing my skills and try to concentrate on the matters at hand, portraying facts rather than fantasy suiting myself before selling out next time. Yes, I know what you meant by all the things left unsaid that now seem so small and insignificant. Practice doesn't always make perfect you can only sell the same lines for so long before they become boring and repetitious. Save it doll, your breath and mine, I can't hold it that long and still breathe. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-28-2003 02:13 PM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
always, always, be yourself, no matter what the fallout, your pretty terrific,anyhow, to thine own self be true |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Loved this Lori!! Be well....Hugs to you! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ Gal .... this is so 'right-on' ... 'Practice doesn't always make perfect you can only sell the same lines for so long before they become boring and repetitious. Save it doll, your breath and mine, I can't hold it that long and still breathe.' Just awesomely emoted~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Well, that's show business for you, like John Wayne said, I'd rather be a failure at something I like than a success at something I hate!" and it would be humiliating to be forced out of creativity! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, God Bless You, act from your heart, it's a wrap, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
got to say..this has some bite to it... and is very well done... enjoyed |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Whew!...you out for somebody?.....LOL...nice write gal....I'm living proof that practice makes perfect though....I've been practicing to be an idiot all my life....and I've accomplished everything I've set out to do! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I always enjoy the wrath of the blues... you express it so well  M hey, I will try to catch up with you this weekend...I should have shoveled snow, but decided to sit here and read etc. instead. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori....ouch!  |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Powerful! Loved it!  Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks for that Michele~ Love that icon Nancy~ Thank you sweet one. Hi Marge~ It's just that it shouldn't be that hard....to breathe. Thanks you~ That's a good quote Noah, it's a wrap all right! Hugs~ Yep, sometimes we just have to bite it! Swallowing it is another story all together. lol~ thanks. Mr Toerag~ You are a fine example, I want to be just like you when I grow up. But that could be a long practice session! *wink* Maureen~ The wrath of blues....hmmmm, that might make for a good title. Thanks for putting a spin on my words. Love and hugs girl friend! It helps to heal old wounds by typing it out. Thanks for reading Martie~ Thank you so much Sunkissed~ |
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