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River
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
River rolling over stones Babbling tales of old Tell me, River, who am I? Who am I meant to be? Babbling River, answer me Before you run to sea Rolling River you know the secrets Of all enslaved and free. Knowing River, please don't whisper- I need to know the truth And be not mistaken By an imitation Of lies and cold untruths River, River flowing fast Have you not one second free? Surely you've enough time to spare For a person such as me. Fleeing River, why do you run Away from me quickly? What is my tale? Why don't you tell? Oh River, set me free I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) All you must do is listen, dearest friend, for, like Siddhartha discovered, the word of Ohm flows with the water and just by listening and realizing the grand beauty of the river, that every spirit of the Earth flows with the water, is enlightening, and knowing such life exists brings strength! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderful, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
KoKo Want to borrow one of my hearing aids, LOL enjoyed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah, I've known the feeling...good one for the book! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely done...much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This one I hope gets in the book. it has got my vote. I just loved it.  Cold hands means a warm heart |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you all so much for you vote of confidence Noah, you speak with truth and wisdom. Thank you, my friend Seymour: LoL! A strangely sweet offer, lol passing shadows: Thank you kindly ~_^ Enchantress: Thank you (= loner: thank you very much! (= Thank you everyone!!!!!!!!!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
There's an underlying feeling of happiness in this one! I like it. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
WOW! I loved the rhythm to this. And the words....  |
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Darkfire k'Sheyna Junior Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 26Maryland, U.S.A. |
I like it! It has nice rhyme and rhythm. Good job! -Darkfire- |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Poet: You're absolutely right. I was actually happy when I wrote this one. I was laying outside with a pen and paper, breathing in the summer air, and that's just what came out. This is, in fact, an older poem of mine, but found it and decided to share it Thanks vandana! (= Albert and Darkfire...I quite like it too!! lol thanks for the compliments!!! Thanks everyone, for taking the time to read and comment!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
KoKo,Great poetry it should be in a book Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Wow! I really like this one!! I can feel your urgency in the later parts as though the river was indeed trying to run away, to escape telling the truth. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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