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Spring....Haiku
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Spring....Haiku |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise 
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Spring Icicles melting In spring thaw Drip Drip Drip Drip Weeping for their lives Poetry is: Passion, imagination and intellect running together. Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa [This message has been edited by CSKpoet (02-27-2003 02:57 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cheryl...this is beautiful. I love the creative way in which you presented this. Wonderfully done.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (02-27-2003 03:14 AM).] |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Don't you just love these little verses? They're so much fun to do, aren't they? . . Hugs, Ethel |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I like the way you wove this together....driping-weeping. INclan |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Not true haiku, but instead something I have never seen here -- TA-DA! An "Ekphrastic" poem..... ...one whose structure depicts what the poem is about. And a good one. Nicely done! I've seen bits of ekphrasis in some of our stuff, and used it in a small way in The Towers Down ( /pip/Forum77/HTML/000152.html ) by making the text resemble an unsteady tower, but I haven't seen it used as such an effective tool to move a poem. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ [This message has been edited by Ratleader (02-27-2003 09:46 AM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
There have to have been other ekphrastic poems around here, I've probably just missed 'em. Anybody got an example? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
CSKpoet Enjoyed the read. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Vivid! yet, with the puddle forming at the bottom, are they, perhaps, weeping away their lives? And yet, the water drop is guaranteed reincarnation, isn't it! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
geez, now I feel bad. I had never thought of it that way...awesome writing! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow!! Love this Cher! ~hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Cheryl, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this made me smile as all your gorgeous words are like spring sun! (kiss on cheek) This is crystal clear, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Cheryl, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I enjoyed the imagery. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ye got me going on ekphrasis -- I just posted one of my own.... not as good as yours, but it was fun! /pip/Forum64/HTML/001019.html ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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