Reflections on passed colors

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Streen
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0 posted 2003-02-25 10:05 PM

Reflections on passed colors

Then, yellow leaves swayed playfully
(and soared over a green mountain of ivy)
through red-and-pink-budded trees
with brown branches that shook up

and down and even grew blue into the sky,
capturing foreverness in the smiling grasp
of a smiling boy not yet acquainted with time and
who did not yet have the dulled-eye

of a world other than a world where
leaping and falling hair hugs the white clouds,
where sounds (are silenced by the sight of
an opening purple flower and) speak in melodies.

Because life was not of gray streets for him,
he could not think of aging buds curled up.
(For the birds stop singing when brown to black,
but the fog rejoices when wood to grain.)

Then, the little boy could not see of dull things
and not of passing time and wilting rocks--
(for stones are only good for skipping blue ripples,)
(and I see now) how sad it is for the colors to pass.

~Streen

P.S. I suggested this one be considered for Passion's next book. So, if you think this poem is up to standard's, please don't accidentally miss the fact that it's up to the vote. Thankee. ^_^

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-02-25 10:09 PM

"up to standards"?? Oh My...this is wonderful!!
What a perfect choice for the new book..
this is so full of wonderful imagery and colours..
I love it!!
~Hugs and a vote!~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2003-02-25 11:09 PM

I'm not so sure about the parentheses(sp) but otherwise I liked it!

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2003-02-25 11:12 PM

I like this one a lot.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mysteria

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4 posted 2003-02-26 12:29 PM

I feel like I was inside this poem and as far as being worthy - my goodness, the color, the imagery in this poem is fantastic! You sure got my vote.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Midnitesun

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Gaia

5 posted 2003-02-26 12:35 PM

I thoroughly enjoyed this, even though I was at first put off by the emphasis of the parenthesis. The second read made me think I heard a soft whisper between the conscious and unconscious voice, a nice reflective/mirror quality.
It would be a wonderful addition to the book.

Dark Angel
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6 posted 2003-02-26 01:09 AM

I'm with Sharon here... not sure about the parentheses, but I love it and it gets my vote.

garysgirl

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7 posted 2003-02-26 01:25 AM

I really liked this poem and think it is very worthy of book submission.

Hugs,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-26-2003 01:27 AM).]

passing shadows
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displaced

8 posted 2003-02-26 02:44 AM

I like it too, but was also wondering about the use of ( )

Nan

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9 posted 2003-02-26 07:45 AM

Passing colors can never be seen again... Well said, Streen...

Mistletoe Angel

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10 posted 2003-02-26 02:08 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Derek, it is so sad to see the colors pass and why we must let go of innocence when it is the basis of all that lives and is peaceful! (sigh) May these colors always shine with you, sweet friend, you have my rainbow smiling vote, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Derek, thank you for sharing!