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6:40 Blue Sky
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6:40 Blue Sky |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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The 6:40 blue sky Hovered like a perfect, Ocean eye, Watercolor painting. And we traveled, not so comfortably, You and me, The car’s cracking Filling quiet. Looked at you and quickly turned, Shuddering in stillness. Ahead lay road, I, ready to take up its peace, To let the chill of it to deaden me. But I sat, waited, Long and lonely. Kicked old cans And coughed. And we never spoke The cold beauty of 6:40 blue Took us in With silent pain. - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (02-25-2003 01:57 AM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, This is one of your best so far. Each stanza has something special to say. As a whole it is incredibly unique. Such talent! Honestly enjoy rereading this. Terrific! Hugs and love, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gee, this is sort of sad to me, good write |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, Came across this again and still enjoy your poetic talent: Such as: "The 6:40 blue sky Hovered like a perfect Ocean eye Watercolor painting" And: "The car's cracking Filling quiet" And: "Ahead lay road I, ready to take up its peace, To let the chill of it deaden me." And: "The cold beauty of 6:40 blue Took us in With silent pain." I especially like this entire poem. Think you wrote it well. I feel the "not so comfortable" ride. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Pat, wow, two replies, thank you! I wrote it just real quik to get the thoughts of the care ride out of my head; but that sky really was perfect. And it made me wonder why they call something midnight blue when midnight is so black. I'm glad that you enjoyed this so much thank you.Dixie, you always like the sad ones. I'll keep 'em comin' just for you  thanks for the reply.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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cinnamongirl Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 217 |
Wow... this is pure magic... the waves of repressed emotion... just amazing! I have to agree- this is one of your best! Sometimes poems are inside your heart, just waiting to be born... and I am thankful that you have given this one birth and shared it with us! I am just in awe of your incredible talent... what a wonderful listener to your own soul you are. Love, Moca |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
wow Moca, what an incredible reply, I don't feel worthy... I don't think I really have talent.. I just write what I can't get out of my head, and use a thesaurus to do it! lol I thank you though for your reply Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Alyssa: So far still loving your writing! Awesome stuff....... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Alyssa, this does feel sad, sweet friend, I hope now the skies have went into robin egg blue and singing with happy bluebirds warbling with joy for you! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, this would be perfect for Reflections, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alyssa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Can't believe theres one I never replied to! Albert, glad you like it and others... thank you very much appreciated!Noah, well despite the pain, it really was a beautiful sky! None in reflections for me, but thank you much for saying that Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Alyssa, thank you from my heart |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Dixie, Hugs to you I'm glad this might mean something to you., don't thank me, I thank you.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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