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"The Core" |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
So hesitant, the slightest touch might lead those hands astray again, that time and tide become as such, no more an obstacle , my friend. The grains within the hour-glass shall cease to heed the cry to fall as weighty matters now surpass their theshold, need, begins to call. Begrudgingly to aquiesce control to overwhelming force, resistence, of itself, a goal, though futile on this present course. A puppet to a master plan, one's mind alone controls the strings. It is for this , he hesitates, the focus of the words which bring, no true relief, no lasting joy, at best an instants' as commence, the words to flow out from within, the core of all his hesitance. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Deep stuff, and good work. Liked this, I did!! *very interesting* |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You've peeled this one off quite nicely. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
this was interesting, if a bit prosaic. i seriously am surprised you have not had more looks. take it easy. -majnu |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
kinda sad |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
BluesSerenade, Thank you. There are days when I am hesitant to pick up the pen. Working within a form, with the tools of meter and rhyme,at times reveals more than I am willing to write. Not that I've got too many dark secrets or anything( most of it borders on the absurd and ends up filed under "W") but, poetry is kind of an introspective thing. Doc Midnitesun, Thanks. Layers upon layers, all built around the assumption that I have something to say that others might find interesting. Doc majnu, Thanks. I'm glad you found this interesing. As for more people commenting, I've become somewhat isolated because of my failure in replying to other peoples writings, but that was my choice, it's all a matter of how I choose to spend what limited time I have. I can either write, or I can reply,I have not yet figured out how to do both at the same time. Be well. Doc passing shadows, Yes it is. Thank you. For all my false bravado and buffoonery, I'm actually just a regular Joe in a very confusing place trying to put some kind of order to that which cannot be controlled. Doc |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Doc... especially the second verse. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
..."the words to flow out from within"--and nicely done at that! ~ May the words continue to flow from your core... Have a glorious day! EA |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
suthern, Shhh,here within a stolen moment(not to let the clock to hear), tick as tieves come wok dee wok forgetting all that you believe. Tock has fled , his path un-noticed, leaving void to fill his space, everything we ever knew has dissappeared without a trace. Gone. Let us begin. Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
EA, Thanks, very nice of you to reply. Doc |
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