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Between Storms |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Between Storms In the hush of afternoon, bare limbs stretch, buds beg to open crimson-ivory petals. Light bleeds through charcoal velvet clouds. Variegated veins sway in breezy byways and dance between strands of daffodils - lush bands bending. Moss-covered stairwell offers ephemeral spring. Enfold it at once, before frigid winds return to wrap us in sheets of rain. © 2003 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-16-2003 05:15 PM).] |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow, great job! The ending makes me sad, though...But it also encourages me to make the most of today!  Great read, much enjoyed!I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
You know.. this kind of made me think about how all of our lives are here with the war on terrorism and the situation in Iraq. It seems that we are caught in a storm, with lulls inbetween. Yes, we should love and cherish each other before the next blast comes... Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cor, The flight of a moment, very good. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, this is good.......starting with the titl....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a picture! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Loved the sheets of rain to be wrapped in. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice to read you again..it has been a while... great imagery in this..with the reader allowed to experience that moment..just before change... I enjoyed my friend.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you Kok, Lovebug, Sey, and Garysgirl, Passing Shadows and Kethry! Captain Ron, good to see your words again, too. Life has been keeping me way too busy. Not much spare writing time. Hoping to change that soon. And thank you! Cor [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-16-2003 05:17 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Corinne, this is sad but true, sweet friend, we seem to be crawling between storms and I only pray we can break free and find our place in the sun all across the world! (sad sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-16-2003 06:07 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Love your wordplay and vivid imagery, well done |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne--This time inbetween, so beautiful, and your words made it come alive. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So eager for the spring myself, this was very well done. ThisDiamond |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
In the hush of afternoon, bare limbs stretch, buds beg to open crimson-ivory petals. Light bleeds through charcoal velvet clouds loved these lines... have been back and read this several times..and each time these jump off the page. just had to tell you... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sweet Noah, thank you! Aenimal - thank you! Thank you kindly, Martie. Thanks, this Diamond! Capitan - I am honored (bows) that you have read this more than once! Title idea came from watching the weather. The poem spilled out quite differently from what I pictured, but that's okay. Came out more universal and less self-focused. Also came out slightly sensual (at least, I hope!). Cor |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully expressed, Corrine! This would be a wonderful addition to the book! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Denise - you are so kind, thank you! Corinne |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Sigh.... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I like seeing this, reading it. As always.....enjoy your work. Ed |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks Albert and Ed! Cor |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I have always been a fan of your work. You make your words stand out from the page, and your use of form and image is excellent. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
I like the new photo, Cor...and I truly admire this poem... Well done! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'm glad you're submitting this. the Wind is invisible. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne... This is wonderful... I wonder how many times I had responded like this to your poetry... but it is true... and that is exactly what it is... wonderful... Regards, Sudhir |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"...before frigid winds return to wrap us in sheets of rain" ...this is sooo good! more, please Rf |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very vivid imagery!! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Cor, hon. very gentle smile...this flows as nicely as the rain itself..Nicely done |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you all for your kind, sweet comments! Cor |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is so beautiful!  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This is beautiful! Susan |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
not sure if i voted the first time so i'll try again |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In the hush of afternoon, bare limbs stretch, buds beg to open crimson-ivory petals. Light bleeds through charcoal velvet clouds. Variegated veins sway in breezy byways and dance between strands of daffodils - lush bands bending. =========================== outstanding imagery and personification. more superb succinctity from your gifted pen. " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yeah... forgot to vote on this... you know what I think of it... or should. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wasn't kidding when I said you were among my favorite poets here at Passions. This is an exquisite example of why. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Corinne~ This is so beautifully expressed, and includes some wonderful imagery. Nicely done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you all, this warm response is very unexpected - and wonderful! Corinne |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Absolutely magnificant! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Awe-inspiring....more please..... Bridgette |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne sweet poet, Wonderfully discriptive of the moment. It has to go in the book. So is it common to be stretching bare outside between the storms in your part of the country or is that an Irish thing...  Park |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
nice ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
The inner Core of poetry speaks. Click. What wonderful imagery, a gentle sadness to it, but oh so beautiful. May the rains remain gentle. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Perfect... Voting here...  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OH WOW!! How did I ever miss this? Gets my vote! Beautiful! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I can smell the storm. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Corinne - oh yes, this one has my vote, nice write... BC |
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