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Thoughts Of You
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Thoughts Of You |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia 
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 I sit alone beneath the sun On this perfect Summer's day My life hasn't been the same Since the day you passed away As I stare across still waters I hear a seagull's mournful cry My heart still feels so empty As the days move slowly by So lost I am without you But my love stays ever clear When I close my eyes at night I imagine that you're here You were taken from me so quickly I was not with you when you died My heart lay torn and tattered And a sea of tears were cried Thoughts of you are always with me And my memory remains so strong I still miss your loving presence Some days can be so long The sun starts sinking lower As this day comes to an end My life's moved on without you But my heart will never mend The gulls take flight, the moon is full As I turn and walk towards the hill I stand and let the moon reflect On times we had, I'll never forget Your guiding light shines down on me You're part of the moon, the sun and the sea * * * * This is a rewritten version of the first poem I ever wrote, just on two years ago.My words describe the great sense of loss I felt at losing my father to asbestos cancer in 1999. To this day he is still the driving force behind my writing. * * * * One word frees us of all the weight and pain of life, That word is love. I am in motion |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so beautiful it just has to be in the book Sue.  Cold hands means a warm heart |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
this is just lovely ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sue, how fortunate you were to have a father you loved so deeply and can write about. He was a very lucky man to have a daughter like you. How proud he is as he shines down on you. Huggles, Marti Dwelling on the negative simply |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suetang I read your work although I don't often reply. You have my vote on this one. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sue, I am so pleased you chose this one for the book sumission. I know your father is so very proud of you.. You and he were so close..I'll bet he's smiling at you now! ~Hugs & a vote~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) God Bless You, sweet friend, my heart cries out to your dear fathers loss also but I know with all my heart his love will always be the light of the stars, the whispers of the ocean, every blooming flower of spring and the perfume of the lilacs! (BIG ANGEL HUGS) He will always be the voice in your heart, telling you he loves you and the angel whisper, you are his poetess and little angel, so continue to write for him as you truly are a golden-hearted angel of words:  (wipes tears) God Bless You, sweet friend, I most graciously offer you my proud vote and angel hugs, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
painful, but beautiful, I can picture you sitting by the water writing this. Enjoyed. - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Sue, I can relate with a shared sympathy on losing a Dad, mine five years ago. This is a beautiful testimonial of your love for him. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very nice... Enjoyed every word.  Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
A wonderful and loving tribute.... Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Thank you all so very much for your overwhelming replies. Noah, the picture is simply stunning and I thank you for your thoughtfulness. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sue darling heart sometimes I lose my way to the light and seem to wander in darkness for an eternity. But when I do, and of late I really do, I know that your words will shine the light that signals the way home. Thank you for this delightful gem darling one it is utterly utterly wonderful. I will try to come in more often, its just right now it is really difficult, sometimes a pain is better not shared, it simply hurts too much. But be assured that when I do find my way here it is your work I’ll cling. Yes this is exactly how it is, the shock, the loss, I truly feel bereft of his presence. You are an amazing writer thank you for this and yes you have my vote  Love and warm stuff as always Mushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Absolutely love Sue, and of course he is one of my favorite artists, so that was a wonderful choice of art to compliment your piece. Vote's in. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
So beautiful, Sue..... "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a beautiful way you have about you Sue. I so enjoy your writings. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sue~ Very touching write from your heart. Thanks for sharing with us...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (02-26-2003 10:56 PM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Sue, this is absolutely beautiful. I think it should be in the book. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sue, Doing my part to get this in the book. But most importantly to support you in dealing with your loss. Every morning we wake up...and they're still gone. Peace and hope to you friend. Thank you for sharing this write again and I hope it makes the book.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Sue - you share your soul with us here and oh so well - just a great poem and thanks for posting it again for us who missed the first time - Paul |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suetang - this is more warming than I can say, my vote for the book... BC |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's a wonderful tribute, Sue...  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
You're part of the moon, the sun and the sea how special it would feel to be that... wonderful work  regards, sudhir |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Sue, I began writing after my Father died also...that was about 5 years ago and I haven't stopped yet *s hugss M |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Beautifully written, Sue. You certainly get my vote! Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sue these are beautiful loving words for you father...fantastic writing...James |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Yes. The first write, the inspiration for writing...definitely book material. We are all enriched by your depth of love for your father, and this is a wonderful way for all of us to thank him for gifting us such a wonderful poet. |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
Moving |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A wonderful tribute. Maree  |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Beautiful sentiments for your father. Joyce |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This is one of the reasons they call it "Passions"... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Sue... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sue, this should definitely be in the book. You spoke the words I feel from missing my Grandmother. I understand. Luv Sandra |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Very pretty poem... You've got my vote! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sue - Oh my can I relate to this - wasnt by his side either - this is lovely and yes I feel him watching sometimes - if this is the first thing you wrote - My goodness - is excellent - thank you Sue - this one meant sooo much to me without you even knowing! xxoo Good Luck |
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