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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-02-24 02:02 PM

A Peaceful Song

I paint and rearrange
The stars with a brush.
I set music from a corner,
And it echoes to another edge
Of lovers' minds,
And bestows solace upon prilgrims-
Whose hearts are serving the Lord,
The creator of this scene.

//the challenge was to use no adj. Did I do it right?


~Every girl has a dream within.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (02-25-2003 10:19 AM).]
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1 posted 2003-02-25 02:11 AM

Well outside of a tiny spelling mistake "enchoes", think you mean echoes but not sure, this is right!  Right on!

          
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2 posted 2003-02-25 03:10 AM

you did great!
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