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Minister Joe Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 78TX, USA 
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I should speak to you with my dead tongue tonight phones lines will burn, sizzle, pop, blow you’ll blow “No”, cracking the plastic handset in a roller-coaster ride grip click—click—click— grease burning smell and sound of the car being pulled up the rise we’re at the top and there’s only that one second God grants before we dive I will speak to you with my dead tongue tonight in a language you can’t understand because I can’t comprehend you any more Latin is as dead as we are but it is still more loving than we ever were I can’t speak to you with my dead tongue tonight not everything, not my full disclosure there’s this cavern inside of you I get lost, I get cold but you always find me with some gasoline-soaked rag wrapped around your hand, and you light it your arm the torch, your hand the flame your pain forgotten when we touch your flesh is burning, but burning for us You always come back for me burnt up in apology scarred hands in regret if you hold my face tonight with those hands, I will forget… click---click---click--- Umbra Gelida--Lost in the Sun [This message has been edited by Minister Joe (02-24-2003 03:49 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I'm in awe!awesome write! I love the ending! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A stark write... an even bleaker loss... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Minister Joe About as good as it get, good job. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Matt, Eyes blinking, mouth gaping open here. Extraordinary poetry. Might I add I am so glad you joined us here and chose to share your talent with us? Thank you, Hugs, ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Matt, what a presentation...I loved it. Yeah, I'm glad that you deided to join us here, too. You are and awesome writer.....  Hugs, Ethel....garysgirl [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-24-2003 12:29 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Matthew, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love the action-packed ending! (big hugggssssss) You truly are an incredible new writer here, sweet friend, I am becoming a fan of you, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Matthew, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I am so sorry I have missed you until now and won't miss you again, as this was outstanding poetry. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You always come back for me burnt up in apology *** Did you guess which one I would highlight? |
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Minister Joe Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 78TX, USA |
Thank you ALL! What a great thing to back to after a dr's appt.--very wonderful indeed to be here. Now, I'm afraid--you all have inspired me to write something regarding my experience here--greatness, just greatness. :O) midnightsun... ya know--I had a feeling that you might have chosen that one! --Matt Give what you have. To someone, it may be better than you dare to think. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A dead language, a dead quarrel, and an injured phoenix rising to do it all again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I can safely surmise that you must know that you have written a winner by all the enthusiastic replies you have received! I am adding one more to the list: "FANTASTIC WRITING!!!" Warm hugs and a big smile, Linda P.S. That is a handsome photo! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Matt...You write with passion and cut glass. Well done! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
That thing that bsquirrel said. ~wranx "The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable" |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I really enjoyed this piece.Very glad to have you on the forums. Jason |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
SEcond poem, second vote, now it's etched in stone. You are a very talented writer. I like you style of writing The images are amazing Best regards Liz |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Love it, it's rhythm and the promise contained in the last verse. Margherita |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Just stoppin in to say hi  .Yea, you know this one is amazing :claps:. |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Amazing...I am in awe.... Great work! Heather |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You always come back for me burnt up in apology scarred hands in regret if you hold my face tonight with those hands, I will forget… Love the way you ended this...love the whole poem. You have my vote MJ Maree. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Joe - sempre libera my friend excellent xxoo |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Simply unbelieveable, Joe. The references to latin are dead on. How you tied those to what you wanted to say is perfect. |
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