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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-02-23 09:52 PM

Through grey, tears mingle
escape in the cold downpour
liquesce of pain

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Not my best but sometimes you just have to write and post until something worthwhile escapes

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-23-2003 09:57 PM).]

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

1 posted 2003-02-23 09:56 PM

This was nice. Very nice indeed. I get such feeling from it.
Tanya

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-23 09:56 PM

Oh this is more than worthwhile!
This is beautiful poetry!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-02-23 09:58 PM

way too kind, thanks for the replies

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-02-23 10:01 PM

This is so beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

5 posted 2003-02-25 10:50 PM

I am not sure how best to respond. I do not wish to give the impression that I do not like this poem. However, I do not see this as the typical "soft and cuddley". This strikes me a tough, hard, and cold. My compliments...for making me think on this one a while.

INclan

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-02-25 11:20 PM

thanks loner

INclan glad it inspired thought and i welcome that compliment

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-02-26 03:29 AM

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

8 posted 2003-02-26 10:44 AM

dixie not

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Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2003-02-26 08:42 PM

(sigh) Oh Raphael, this is definitely worthwhile, it doesn't matter the length of a poem, it is the heart and honesty that matters and your poetry floods with it! (big huggssssss) This is delightful, sweet friend, always follow your Muse, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2003-02-26 08:48 PM

Your P.S. is as
poignant
as the post...

sometimes we drop into oblivion...
but only for
a short while...

keep writing.

I'm reading...
even through bad times...

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2003-02-26 08:49 PM

Thanks Noah too kind

Thanks sunshine been a rough time writing lately but it will come soon enough

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