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Together's Sweet Song
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Together's Sweet Song |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ripped a hole in my shadow, peeked into my shine, my golden essence you endeavored to find. Fine fragrance of fantasy, splashed me in splendor, bathed in the lusciousness, of my psyche, so tender. No need to search farther, downed velvet volition, the soft side your soul, confirmed intuition. My long lost lover, come we'll dream dance delight, our merged souls sway, in love's lavender light. Pleasant passion unended our joy we belong, forever and always in together's sweet song. . . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Pat...this is so very lovely...softly sensual..full of romantic thoughts. Much enjoyed. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so beautiful and romantic Cold hands means a warm heart |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
So sweet, soft, smooth. Love it, I think the first lines are my favorite, "ripped a hole in my shadow" bring so many pictures to mind. Enjoyed much  Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
So very beautiful. I loved it. Very romantic indeed. Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ripped a hole in my shadow, peeked into my shine, these are some of the best lines I've read |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, this is beautiful...  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
a beautiful romantic bit. -majnu |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very dreamy, oh, if love was only this uncomplicated all the time, but then again, what would i have to write about? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...nice title...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ripping holes in shadows? ouch! |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
singing in harmony two happy souls contentedly Wonderful to see Hope |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Nancy Lee, Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for reading. the-loner-23, Happy you found this beautiful and romantic. Alyssa, Sweet, soft and smooth? Wow, thanks! I liked the first line, too. My grandsons (11 & 14) were here for the better part of the week-end...and they came up with a couple of words needed to rhyme later in poem. What fun! Glad to see you back here...hugs. Tanya, Thanks for taking the time to read and reply, and that you love this. Raph, Those are my two favorites lines, as well. At first I had written danced in my sunshine....but, I opted for this and like it better...thanks. Ethel, Thanks for the beautiful. Majnu, Thanks for reading and replying. Inked, Grinning here...I think you'd find something; may all your dreams come true... hugs... James, Glad you liked the title and enjoyed. Dixie, Given your username, I can understand your ouch.... Hope, Thank you for taking the time to respond and for the wonderful to see. Hugs, to you all. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Very nice work, Pat, loved the wonderful and creative imagery in this piece. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Wonderful, beautiful, magical and everything else good! I love your writing pat!  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Patricia, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, let the song of tomorrow always echo happily and strum your heartstrings like a ukulele! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is precious, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-24-2003 08:25 PM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very nice, Pat. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhPat~ How truly remarkable is this penning~ YOU, lady ... are totally remarkable~ What a pure pleasure to how you have taken your craft and worked it so well~ I love you, my TRUE friend~  Keep *gifting* the words being shared ... for HE has decreed it~  Have a beautiful day of peace and contentment~  If and when 'they' ever let you grace these pages again ... I will still be here shooting my arrows straight~  Honest Injun !!! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ Okay ? ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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