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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2003-02-14 07:06 PM

tumble down
and drop slides slow
down the edge
of where I was
crawling to
where I will be
tumble down
upside of me
invisable...
in bounce of this
lover, blowing
"goodbye kiss"
and just a wink
of angry eye
lover
knowing
he won't cry...again...

silver of the moon entrailed....
turn the page
my diary
trace the leaves
of wandering
touch the sequin
as it lies
sparkling
in liquid trail
existentialist--
aware...
knowing glitter
is a drop
reflecting me
in my mind's prop...

to look behind the mirror'd glare.

I look for entrance in the stare.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-14-2003 09:25 PM).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2003-02-14 07:12 PM

"sparkling
in liquid trail
existentialist--
aware...
knowing glitter
is a drop
reflecting me"

why can't I do it like this?!

you so rock.....

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

2 posted 2003-02-14 07:50 PM

Serenity~ Touching thoughts.
Do I get 20 questions to try and figure out what this touching write is about?
Lets see Teardrop falling, Memories of better times, saddness, self acceptance?
I hope all is well with you.
Happy Valentines Day...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

3 posted 2003-02-14 08:24 PM

serenity - lovely your thoughts...

BC

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2003-02-14 08:59 PM

(smiles) That's what I love about your poetry always too, sweet friend, you are so graceful and you can be taken so many different ways! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, can't wait to see the shades of Alice glow even more from you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing, and have a...

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

5 posted 2003-02-14 10:12 PM

Oh yes...now this is the way to write!! I'm with SEA, and wondering how I can do this!

A truly happy person is one who
can enjoy the scenery on a detour!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-02-14 10:19 PM

Very good, Karen...I've been missing you...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2003-02-15 03:56 PM

to look behind the mirror'd glare.

I look for entrance in the stare.

Hey Sexy Lady, an excellent write... especially those last two lines.

adding this to my library.

and thanks for the e, will e back

Maree

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

8 posted 2003-02-15 04:11 PM

Wow...That was great!!! It really, really turns your mind upside down...Those lines that SEA quoted, same ones I was going to quote. The whole poem itself was excellent, but that part really stands out!!! Wonderful job

And forget not that the earth delights to feel your bare feet and the winds long to play with your hair. -Kahlil Gibran

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

9 posted 2003-02-15 10:41 PM

knowing glitter
is a drop
reflecting me

what a beaufitul drop to witness then

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