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Fatman
New Member

since 2003-02-21

Posts 8

0 posted 2003-02-21 02:39 AM

Dampness clung to the walls, to the floor,
Clinging to the inhabitant of cell fifty-four,
With the coming dawn she knew, she would be no more.
She wrote because she would be no more.
When I questioned the stones of her last dark night,
In their slow grinding way…
This is the tale they told;

She whispered upon an old crinkled sheet,
It’s edges curled with use.
Quill scratched paper with ink that flowed deep.
Her words brought to life the town that never sleeps…

A gust bursts forth upon the empty streets.
Rippling across the water, rustling through the leaves,
Blowing faery dust, carried by the winds,
That falls like a feather upon a sleeping cheek.
Light bursts forth upon the waking street.
The busy baker bakes, as a hungry urchin weeps.
Life bursts forth upon the bustling streets,
Hailing another day for the town that never sleeps.

…A clear drop splotches the black of her ink.
It ran down and mingled with the blood from her lips.
Thus Sorrow she painted across the busy street.
And Memories she wrote of the town that never sleeps.

These were the words the timeless stones used,
How eloquently they spoke, how beautifully she wrote.
As the life faded from the crumbling walls,
Her tale, her paper floated down to the floor…
And there it lay alive forevermore…
The tale inside of cell fifty-four.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2003-02-21 03:03 AM

Wow! Vivid and compelling read.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-02-21 03:15 AM

Welcome to Passions!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-02-21 09:10 AM

(big hugggssssssss) This is a powerful and poignant debut, sweet friend, very emotionally telling, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all ve inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-02-21 09:15 AM

Welcome to Passions! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2003-02-21 09:26 AM

~Welcome to Passions~

I liked your first poem which left a few questions, but that is what poetry should do, I think. Look forward to reading more.

Thanks, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-02-21 08:15 PM

A very strong and well-written first post. I really
look forward to seeing more of your work.

Welcome to Passions. I hope that you enjoy it here.

Hugs from
Ethel....garysgirl

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2003-02-21 08:42 PM

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

8 posted 2003-03-26 04:47 PM

This is a georgeous write.....Hope to read more!!!!!!

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

9 posted 2003-03-26 06:00 PM

Welcome to the family! This is incredible. A tale well told. I will look for more of your work!

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-03-26 06:06 PM

A great story here...and because of words, a life lives on even after death. Welcome to Passions!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-03-26 06:17 PM

Fantastic first post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

12 posted 2003-03-26 06:22 PM

Welcome to Passions. You've capture the last moments of an individual life, and painted her portrait with moving words. Well done!

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

13 posted 2003-03-26 09:16 PM

I couldn't make up my mind if I heard John Houston reciting this in the style of The Hobbit or Vincent Price reciting Edgar Allen Poe... Either way, I guess you're in good company! Welcome, and well done.

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

14 posted 2003-03-26 09:46 PM

Powerfull insight.Welcome to passions.

paladin

....a knight without armor

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

15 posted 2003-03-26 10:53 PM

Welcome.....I CANT wait for more!!

Greeneyes~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

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