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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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I sit and eat my french fries like any good little girl would do blank stare The only light the eyes of my son playing alive at least a part of me is alive Sitting here stoic drugged yet desensitized this world people disgust me waxlike nearly transparent to me now I see beneath the smiles the gestures , the french fries all of it I see beneath and surmise They just know how to pretend better than I [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-11-2003 07:01 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Sue this is powerful and so well written. Your son is the innocence with which we all bloomed in our childhood ... and the world's events are so sickening that it is indeed difficult to maintain optimism for humankind. But we must align with children's hope for a better world ... To survive at times we pretend that everything's just fine ... yes. Hugs, my friend. Margherita |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
you possess great insight. passion such as yours can at times be a burden, but know that in your son more than just a part of you lives. my heart goes out to you littlewing [This message has been edited by Edder (04-11-2003 07:13 PM).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sue, You're pretending? I'm glad you're not very good at it!  Nice write.If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I sit and eat my french fries Is there any better way to be??? As usual, a great job. When the morning cries and you don't know why... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Great! I loved this! jwesley |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
littlewing - your writings are excellent, as this one is... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRILLIANT! this one really beats my heart your transparency is multi-hued |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, sometimes we have to just put on a smile and go on.......because, what is the alternative? If we give into our troubles all the time and never smile, we would die inside. I know......  Heart Hugs to you, sweet lady Ethel  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Just when you think things are becoming dark, your child smiles, and the gleam explodes, and laughter fills you like a break moment of insanity... and all becomes right again... ~*~ how quickly these moments run away, Sue... I know... and I understand... hearthugs... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
the eyes of my son...the inoccence of children lights the way when the ignorance of adults clouds it..it sounds good in my head but probably sounds dumb..i'll shut up now |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Margherita - always such sweet words - yes pretending I am - and my son - truly is my angel thank you Edder - so ver sweet - goodness - if this is insight then I dont want it lol - very nice what you said about my son - thank you vandana - thank you for reading Larry - heheh sssshhh . . . dont tell - TY Brad - you know - now fries are my comfort food - thank you thank you jwelesy for reading Bill - thank you - coming from you that means a lot Kacy - multi-hued - heheh I like that thank you - what a compliment Ethel - I know but my face is starting to crack . . . thank you Sun - you got it - right there - that smile always brings me back . . . thank you Raph - it doesnt sound dumb at all and please do not ever shut that mouth of yours - your right - the whole time I was sitting there the only thing that did shine was Billy thank you xxoo Thanks guys xxoo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Could be, that the pretend and the pretense are learned behaviors. The bad news? Your son may never have that camoflage. The good news? With what you give him, he may never need it. A very good write....An honest write. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Ed - made me smile big with that - your words - so very sweet xxoo |
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