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Night Folds
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Night folds So quickly the night folds up the day Taking each shadow’s crease Slipping in across the porch until Only the front door holds the sun From the rocking chair where I watch This sun-gladdened day seeps across the front lawn And weaves across the street As children’s voices start to quarrel I hear the wind around the house now It is the sound of afternoon’s closing door A moan as time moves through the changing And eats minutes and I can tell it hurts some My skin is closing now too Folding into the comfort of clothes Pulling itself closed with fingers that fumble buttons And flannel that has become fragile with soft I watch the last shouting child curve fast Around the hedge Until there is just a piece of blue Then the screen door slams and lights go on With just a flicker of family covering the window Watching has made me remember When children held my skirt and called out As the afternoon chaos swallowed the day And that too hurts some -------- 4-02 |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember...and as before you brought the neighborhood home to my ears, and left the magic behind in a whisper... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"I hear the wind around the house now It is the sound of afternoon’s closing door A moan as time moves through the changing And eats minutes and I can tell it hurts some" Such simple, simple words, and so absolutely loaded with depth and dimension. You're a treasure. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, I can't remember if I've told you or not, but I can't seem to read a poem of yours just once. If I don't read it over again while I'm at it, I go back a lot of times to just read. There is always something new that I find each time I read over them. I could never begin to tell you a certain part that I like the best, unless I typed the whole poem over again. It seems as if there are little gems you hide within your poems. Do you do that on purpose, or is your writing so excellent that it just happens? You really do amaze me, Lady. Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write here Martie.. Your precise imagery is amazing..takes the reader right there. Much enjoyed the read and the memories it evoked. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie In your own way you say what you say And it lights places that were never lit. You delight me no end.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I hear the wind around the house now It is the sound of afternoon’s closing door A moan as time moves through the changing And eats minutes and I can tell it hurts some simply beautiful Martie. You hold me in awe every time dear lady. hugs and love Maree  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My words cannot do yours justice... Love & Light, Linda |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - your words take me to memories I haven't visited in a long time - how wonderful the way you share with us and take us on old and new journeys and sometimes it does hrt a little but what wonder you bring us - lovely - Paul |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhSis~ How tenderly you touch me~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Time stands still when I read your words and always, always I am captured for a moment by memories that you bring to life so vividly. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yet I revel in my children's little ones repeating that same wonderful experience... This is a lovely poem, Martie...  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
lovely Martie...I seem to remember (thanks to you) but I also remember from the kid's perspective - when I lived with my grandmother and she sat in the rocker... neat. jwesley |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Watching has made me remember When children held my skirt and called out As the afternoon chaos swallowed the day Martie, Martie, Martie....you've done it again lady! Perfection. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
always so delightful... for some reason our minds must run the same trail. I write a poem gem and flip over to passions (read all your stuff) to post it where I find you have already written all my words (heart). love from Idaho sis. dale |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
While I was reading I thought 'is this an older poem'? And I can't tell from the date...it could mean April 2nd, or April 2002... I'm all confused...lol... Unless you've had a shift in style... as usual Martie you're the queen of imagery... huggles  K |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Martie, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I always love your gorgeous imagery in your poetry and could imagine the children hugging me and asking me to play with them and I giving them hugs when they feel sad. (kiss on cheek! God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martie - peace to you - one day I will look back on this and my heart will bleed with you xxoo |
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