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Wordsong (Duet with Martie)
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Wordsong (Duet with Martie) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Wordsong A poem cannot tell you this, no not really, not how to catch the fading of twilight and move it from charcoal to the color of something that stops my heart; it cannot say "believe" and shut off doubt or sing the chorus of cicadas and make it a lullaby. Yet it can bring forth the ache of butterscotch, that speaks of love in ways that words cannot; can form life in the pine drenched silence of a mountain lake, the trout-swirl pink and meaningful as it dares the surface, and it can play the chords of light in my heart's trembling rainbow, sing those notes until your heart vibrates in tune. A poem cannot tell you the sweet fragrance of a cloudburst in the heat of summer, but it brings you to that moment when the storm tang fills a hesitating wind, the tumbling suspense as one leaf falls, still wet and green, out of a sunlit sky; it will not be content to speak of rain then, nor describe the jewel captured still trembling within the nasturtium's leaf when it is through, no, it will catch that silver sparkle, wrap it in the sound of droplets falling into waves of grass, and save that scintillating vision for all time. Can it describe the hand that rests, warm and comfortable within the curve of a long loving couple, or the look that years can bring to understanding? That, and more; it can place that hand so gently, finger tip by finger tip, upon your hand, that for a moment you are one with them, the warmth of their shared breath joining with yours, their peaceful joy a treasure of your own. A poem yes, can take this sunlit sky all blue and joyful and translate it with the eyes of heart into a photograph of something diaphanous that moves through the trees like wind; and where the shadows play the power lays, just a tremble in the curtain waiting in wish of tender certain through the sliding door like harp of smile, it can sing across the miles and turn words into a shiver on a shoulder all alone until the poem you're reading feels more like coming home. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (04-10-2003 06:16 PM).] |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Nicely done! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I felt I had come home in the reading of this. It was seamless in its presentation. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Flawless...beautiful..exquisite! You two du-et so well. I do hope we shall see more...and soon! ~Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Coming home...staying in library... wishing you two would submit this to the Book... so we could hold it in our hands! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
WOW!!! Now this was a read worth it's weight. I so enjoyed it and hope you two will team up again. You compliment each other extremely well. Hugs for peace, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis and Ed~ coming home indeed~ This is a masterpiece of poetic blending~ Beautiful, you two~  *Huglets* for BOTH~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well Martie, folks are calling for more -- I'm game, are you? This was my first Duet as you know, and I really enjoyed it. So, I'd be honored if you'd grant me the pleasure of another dance..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bravo!!  This is just wonderful. Congratulations you two! More please. hugs to you both. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is a photograph of words penned to perfection. Such a loving collaboration, so full of meaning and the things that really matter. Beautifully done you two~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is superb! I echo Sunshine... submit! adding into my library. Maree |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Great write you make quite a pair |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey...thanks so much poet friends, and Ed..it was a pleasure to duet with you...and yes, I'd love to do it again! You made it easy, you are such a good poet...and friend too. Thank you!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed and Martie - this did bring me home - truly - and you know . . . this poem DID say all of those things and more - what a beautiful job - nice team and beautiful imagery from you both - made me smile - thank you . . . xxoo should have booked it . . . [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-11-2003 02:44 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, please... duet again...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I read this quickly right after it was posted... and in that moment, it became a heart favorite. *S* Several readings later, I still find I'm lacking the words to do it justice... so I'll just say I loved it from the title through the last word... a poem from the pen of such masters is indeed coming home. *S* Beautiful, seamless collaboration!! |
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morefiah Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 150Spanish Town, Jamaica |
Hope you don't mind if I steal this away and lock it in my little box of favorite things.... No, that would be selfish, and it so deserves to be shared. Wonderful. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now this is like giving a child one smartie, so I hope you two are going to share the entire box?  This was stunning! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
The harmony here is outstanding. Do you write music Ed, I was just wondering. I was thinkin' of Stills when I read it through the 3rd. time... you two fit like a hand in a glove on this one and it looks as though there may be another in the making. My congrats. lucky dale |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read very nice |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is superb writing! Into my library. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How did I miss this??????? I looked at the date and think it was when I was out of town back in april... OH my...how lovely is this write of poetry and imagery..how impressive is your twos imagery and personification, and the theme youve chose...This should have been put in the book...its a poets poem. And now the moth is wondering how she can ever hope to duet in the shadow of this superb write ... me thinks me needs a note from me mommy... or a doctors excuse for me muse putting this one in me mothy library and printing one out to go on my desk. I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed and Martie, I have no idea how I missed this either, but I'm glad that I didn't this go-round. Do you two mind if I kep thi, too? It tells exactly what poetry is, doesn't it? Thanks to you both, and heart hugs to you both,  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how'd I miss this one? well, better late than never |
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