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Boston Mountains part 2
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Boston Mountains part 2 |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
“ I heard you yesterday talking to her, while you slept” she said as she stared out the side window watching pine and ok slide by in curves of green as we headed up into the Boston’s. Pavement had turned to gravel So our pace had slowed To the tune of gravel pings Against the underside Of wheel wells “ A ghost.” I said, “that’s all she is now.” “She used to be real to me, but not now.” “this yours?” she asked holding up the bullet that I had put in my shirt pocket. “Her parting gift to me.” I replied as I swerved to miss a pothole. “You scare me a little.” She said. And turned the bullet between her fingers As if to polish off the names. “You get your shots today, I’ll take you back.” I said with a sense of clouds descending On hill tops that are too cold for fog And too dry for snow. “We’ll see.” She mumbled The day dawned clear Except a few low clouds that hung Over the deep valleys So she framed the pictures between trunks Of pine, leaving a limb of green in this one A bare twig in that. I watched her Wondering at her intensity And entranced by how she moved In bend and lean of lenses Sun was flooding us when she quit. Her sigh as she sat down and absently began packing Wiping each lens with care Betrayed the energy put into the images. “You think you could love someone else?” she asked me as the last tripod was folded. “ In time, perhaps.” I answered and stowed her gear. “Let’s go swimming.” She replied with a laugh “and see if it washes any of the ugly off you.” Later… We lay naked in the sun Neither of us looking at the other as we let the warmth dry us And both feeling too shy To touch. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I go to sleep for a couple hours.....and he's in Boston???? Geez....I gotta catch up here!!!!! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) They say "Love is kind, love is patient and love understands all things.", I suppose it will only take a little time until the shyness disappears and a mutual understanding can develop, I can't wait to see how it happens! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, swet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Duncan... Boston Mountains are in Arkansas north of where you left him when you decided you had to sleep ( chuckling) Noah..thank you sir.. your words are always kind and always appreciated. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The day dawned clear Except a few low clouds that hung Over the deep valleys So she framed the pictures between trunks Of pine, leaving a limb of green in this one A bare twig in that. ~*~ I've stood here... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Whew...I didn't think I slept THAT long! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Ron, how can you write so much and be so good at the same time? you are amazing... LOL at the last stanza...a revert back to kindergarten love perhaps? heehee man, i got to play catch up! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Great! There is a famous picture with that branch crossing. (Hmmm, maybe it is hers...laughing here.....NOT!! That is a good scene, even the pings in wheel wells and avoiding pot holes all bring it to life so very well...and the closing scene, indeed not because of shyness, however...since both seem to have been around the block a couple times I'd think **building tension for what's to come is more likely... Ah, luscious....(my opinion)....and finally, let's hope that bullet ~fell~ out of his pocket and she hasn't progressed to checking pockets smiling....Came back to add this comment: Hmmmm...as the talented writer you are, you must have considered **that...so now, I wonder why you choose ~SHY~ instead of writing about ~building tension~....being the novice that I am I, I am curious. Is it just because **that is too obvious? My folders don't show colors so never know when poet responds. I'll check later in case you might have replied. I hope you don't mind me picking your brain, I learn much... thanks Enjoying these adventures a lot. Thanks, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (02-19-2003 12:40 PM).] |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
“You think you could love someone else?” she asked me as the last tripod was folded... Ah yes....more to come for sure now.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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