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Night song
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Night song |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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I tried last night To soothe you as you slept Pulled you spooning to me Not so much in prurient urge But, to quiet your tremble Wrapped you In what little peace I’ve found For myself Felt you sigh your doubts Into my hair To be tangled there Becoming my crown And breathing your fears Onto my neck Where they stilled and warmed Losing their chill You stirred and draped me With a feverish welcome And I could not breathe For fear of breaking the spell But let my hands Search blindly for your substance While you kissed your yearnings Deep into my chest So that they found their way Into my heart You didn’t know it Never felt it But, I found you Sleeping |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very nicely done... most enjoyed this write... regards, sudhir |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Felt you sigh your doubts Into my hair To be tangled there Becoming my crown Well now...I don't know whether this wonderful write has just kick-started my morning, or if I am going to be left sitting here all day reading and rereading. I know one thing for sure - this is going directly into my library. Awesome. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
One of the most beautiful love songs that I have ever heard--I mean "read"! I scarcely took a breath as I read your words. Your sensitivity and your deeply loving nature came shining through with this tender poem. Love & Light, EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ohhh myyyy yessss...into the library.. to read later..much later.  Softly sensual...very gently spooned, ..I mean crooned.  ~Morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
yes... peaceful sleep, peaceful dreams this is so beautifully written |
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Tara Simms Hall Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 87South Carolina |
Oh, this is so beautiful and loving. I love this! I'd have to say it's one of your best writes yet. Keep them coming... |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very very well done Ed, this is beautiful.And written as only Wranx can write. Jason |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Felt you sigh your doubts Into my hair To be tangled there Becoming my crown ~*~ this stanza is the begin of the breath-hold... and I can't seem to let go of the gasp... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed - your soul is showing . . . but then again - it always does . . .hehehe This IS one of the most beautiful things I have ever read . . . I LOVE THIS . . . Felt you sigh your doubts Into my hair To be tangled there Becoming my crown A beautiful love song treasured forever those doubts entangled forevermore . . . this is amazing . . . truly xxoo |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh my, oh my.... ....way past beautiful, sensitive, loving at it's finest.... this is so special, sighing, here. ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Krystopher Morris Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130Ancient land called Chivalry |
Wow, wonderful way to write! I really, really enjoyed this! Thanks for sharing this delightfully inspiring piece with me and the rest of us! “Death, so called, is a thing which makes men weep, and yet a third of life is passed in sleep.” -Lord Byron |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
amazing - ....your picture - the poem contrast .. yet blend wonderfully shows depth.... & understanding of a soul beautiful & sensual - filled with heart enjoyed this write & look forward to more [This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-10-2003 03:35 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
While you kissed your yearnings Deep into my chest So that they found their way Into my heart Oh my wranx!!! This is absolutely, positively dreamy~ *swoon* |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
This..unexpected, your brilliance as a writer however, is never. A true master of words |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The way you capture moments -- the surface and the depth together -- just masterful. I've been there, that kind moment, and you just helped me re-live it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
Your writing is so impressive, and you actually hold the position im trying to reach, i hope to meet your level of writing at some point. Your really good |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wranx...so tenderly written... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
damn......... Uri Gellar |
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