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Madrigal
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Madrigal |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Madrigal I feel the madrigal’s intense. Floating on the airs dispense. Riding o’er the dreams of eve. O’er the face upon my sleeve. And stardust leaves light imprint. Upon my eyes in misty glint Like floating snowflakes from above. For velvet is the touch of love. I lay a paradise of dream. And in an ecstasy it seem. A phantom in a make believe This angel on my arm my sleeve And she my love just lays in sleep. Unaware my misty deep Beyond my goal of magic’s lace Beyond my soul of sheer embrace I would she tilt her head in slight. And say I’ve dreamed with you tonight. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sy, This is so beautiful. I love the second stanza, especially... Enjoyed greatly, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You are the BEST dreamer I know, Sweet Sy...  ..  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And stardust leaves light imprint. Upon my eyes in misty glint Like floating snowflakes from above. For velvet is the touch of love. ====================================== And she my love just lays in sleep. Unaware my misty deep Beyond my goal of magic’s lace Beyond my soul of sheer embrace I would she tilt her head in slight. And say I’ve dreamed with you tonight. ========================================== Oh my oh my...OH SIGH Oh SY. Youre hanging the moon and making us swoon with this melodic metered tune. BEAUTIFUL Stinkylove ... your rhyme scheme dreams read heart on sleeve. *ww*   " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pat, Thank you so much for the read and enjoy. Nan Thank you my passions nightengale. JM, Only aim to please got some help from Randy on this one. WWRS [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:19 PM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
FINE WRITE Psai.....as always |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I very, very much enjoyed, sweet Seymour... Hugs Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-19-2003 02:45 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Toe, Thank you Toe, what did the Doc give you, some melancoly pills? LOL [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:19 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
garysgirl, That's all I ask. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:19 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Awwwwwwwwww, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, may her spring song always hum deeply in your heart and flitter like the hummingbirds, this is wonderful, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful write Sy! One for the book...for sure! Honey-lemon green tea this morning for my throat.. like to try some?  ~Morning hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have printed out your poems before, framed them, keep them close... this is why... Good morning, Sy... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you dear friend you are kind no end. Nancy, Honey-lemon green tea is fine. Good morning.Sunshine, Your sweet enough to and [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:20 PM).] |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"And she my love just lays in sleep. Unaware my misty deep Beyond my goal of magic’s lace Beyond my soul of sheer embrace I would she tilt her head in slight. And say I’ve dreamed with you tonight" Seymour... *sigh* love how you do this....your words are magic |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SEA Sweet comment, thank you. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:22 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Seymour...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
absolutely gorgeous Seymour Maree. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sy~ Ah yes...smiling and dreaming. Just beautiful, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
loved this |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
James, Thank you, appreciate the stop bye. Dark Angel Reads good to me, thank you. vlraynes Thanks for the read and hugs. Aenimal Loved your reply. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:23 PM).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Yes Sy. This must be in the book!  |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
The whole piece was TERRIFIC! Beautiful but I LOVE THIS ENDING! "I would she tilt her head in slight. And say I’ve dreamed with you tonight" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine You are a sweet heart, thank you. Albert, Thank you so much, I am encouraged. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:25 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
big smile |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Yes, now this, Sir, is among your best. An excellent example of meter and word. Well done. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Seymour, my friend... This is an excellent offering of yours and a great choice for the book... I adore the way you write... regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing shadows Big smile back, thank you. Moonlight Romeo Thank you for the well done. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:26 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Thank you my friend, it's up to the voters. LOL [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 02:26 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Okay, Sy... you've got us all sighing! *G* This is so beautiful I'd like to stuff the ballot box. *G* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern LOL Stuff away. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (02-20-2003 05:34 PM).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
...and your dreams are wonderful |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
hoot, Thank you dear, big hug. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I'm beginning to think ALL of your submissions should be in the book.... Excellent write... Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bridgette, You sure know how to please a guy. LOL Thank you. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"Beyond my goal of magic’s lace Beyond my soul of sheer embrace I would she tilt her head in slight. And say I’ve dreamed with you tonight." Perfect! Rf |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"Beyond my goal of magic’s lace Beyond my soul of sheer embrace I would she tilt her head in slight. And say I’ve dreamed with you tonight." Perfect! Rf |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Robert, That and your vote is perfect. LOL thank you |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now wouldn't this just be the icing on the cake! You are my man Sy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sharon, You are my gal. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (03-08-2003 06:12 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Good choice -- I'm votin'. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Big thank you. Hoot, Big hug, thank you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
SY - I couldnt really fall in love with ONE part of this - for I loved it all - especially the snowflakes and the angel and the tilting of the head - God is just beautiful . . . Like floating snowflakes from above. For velvet is the touch of love. Lovely - xxoo |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy...Time and time again, you steal my heart with your poet's pen.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing You are kind, thank you so much. Martie But you have such a lovely heart, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
back to the top so that this one makes it in the last round...the moth wants lots of Sy guy in this book  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I looked in my earlier reply but didn't see the box with the check mark. Wonder why? Perhaps it's because you submitted it after I read it the first time? Well, that's fixed "click" now!!!! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Such a sweet, beautifully, and dream filled poem, I enjoyed every word of it. Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
YES! This one just begs to be read outloud, even in your sleep.  |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Now how did I miss this gem so long. That's what I get for working in the yard. Very nicely done. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Sunshine Thank you dear. Lost Dreamer Thank you love. Midnitesun You are a sweetheart. kayjay THank you so much. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Wonderful! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
bigger smile the second time around |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SPIRIT Thank you so much. passing shadows Happy with the smile. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful penned as always Sey Charisma |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Charisma I hope that's a vote, LOL thank you. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Once again you have woven a lovely tapestry of thought. Spelndid.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
WhiteRose Thank you for the splendid and the vote I hope. |
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