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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
this could be... that one glorious day, where it all must end and maybe for just one moment, i'll know happiness... could my answer be correct? after so long it seems to be the only one i've lost all my decency, it was stolen long ago by the person i called love... i dont blame her though, for surely it was my own fault well just keep your sweet dreams, and just never look back -lance There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods [This message has been edited by Starsfalling (04-07-2003 08:55 PM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
well just keep your sweet dreams, and just never look back Hello again, I see you were really prolific today. Just a suggestion: I think that you could lose the "well just" from L13. And the "just" from L14. A very good write Lance.  |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
yeah ur right, it does sound better.. thanks lol they tagged me for swearing i said Fing a few times -lance There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods |
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