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A Poem to Lori
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A Poem to Lori |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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I wanted to write a love poem to you, but there is nothing new to write. Enumerate the stars? Describe the smell of the trees? As thousands of poets have done. I could craft romance and sadness in lines. Such as "She walked the road to its end," perhaps? I could relay in the poem the failure of language. A poem about a poem. I admit, I hold selfish reasons for writing this poem at all. If I could claim your eyes, the curve of your lips, I would do so in these words. But the touch of these phrases wilts at even the slightest reader's gaze. I'm putting down my pen. The ink can dry up. Let's meet on the path. You know which one. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I admit, I hold selfish reasons for writing this poem at all. If I could claim your eyes, the curve of your lips, I would do so in these words. But the touch of these phrases wilts at even the slightest reader's gaze. I'm putting down my pen. The ink can dry up. Let's meet on the path. You know which one =============================== YES YES YES... *throwing plane fare money at the screen*  yes...meet and then WRITE what you two inspire cuz its a beautiful thing to witness.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LOL at JM...she invents the most clever lines...the rest of us have to stand in line to read, nod, whisper "yes" to what should be... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...yes |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...Nothing like meeting face to face...James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I hope she sees it *s M |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And know, she does. Lucky girl, lucky guy. That path? Stay on it squirrel dude. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Better than all the flowery verse...this is perfect for her. Get a road map to that path and get moving!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Me thinks someone is in love. Hope I'm correct. Enjoyed. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
damn this makes me  and you said it brother these inadequate words sometimes all we have  loved this Mike |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Awww MIKE...what an awesome poem....for lack of better words, but I was so selfish in my reading....almost a "private" journal entry....indeed beautiful... Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
What better way to express it then with sheer honesty? |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
mike my bf needs lessons from you! man it was beautiful!most guys don't express their feelings well but you did amzing job mike-a-runi!!! lol sorry it's another late night. robin i am who i am and that's all that i am and all i shall ever be and if you don't like who i am then leave! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stunning! |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
This one touches the heart, bsquirrel. enjoyed reading! Sunkissed. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mikey - your pen speaks for your heart - this is beautiful - run down that path my friend . . . xxoo |
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