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Collecting Patterns |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Walking through stillness with my steps 'strumming' signatures in cool earth unbroken landscapes veined by rivers vibrant at their edges blind passionate path of my {reclaiming} If I go back in memory touch everything lightly so my fingers run the edges of windowsills to hold {once} only what may disappear tenderly slidingindarkness where dancing goes on endlessly in {laughter} Would the heart of my nakedness soften holding on spinning in wholeness everything is falling {I am } waiting outside of time while the night collects patterns of voices Silence is here ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Through the darkness I can see your light And you will always shine And I can feel your heart in mine I will remember you [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-05-2003 09:51 PM).] |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
For some reason it makes me feel like walking in the woods at night and feeling the patterns of the evening spin past experiences through my mind....Well written to give me such a strong vision and feeling. Thank you... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I clicked in to this when you first posted, but I am sure by now, [because of an interruption] there are many responses.... all I know is... you make us feel, Lauren...you bring us in to your poems, sometimes leaving us giddy...sometimes, just sighing. I try very hard anymore, to just respond to a poem without looking at the other responses.... but if I have reiterated what others said... please know that I didn't look first...this just comes from the heart... from one wanna be poet, to a poet personified...OK? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~ There are many times when I read what your have so beautifully written and I am at a lose as to just what to say..this is one of those times. You have a wonderful gift dear poetess. I treasure everything you have written and continue to amaze and enchant me with. Thank you for yet another keeper. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lauren, this is beautiful, sweet friend, your poetry always has a way of cpatoivating us all, as gentle as a young fawn drinking from the riverbed in the spring, and the way you spin colors across the waters in your words always enthralls us all, I don't think we can ever say exactly how much your imagery spellbinds us, yay! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - your writing is like a warm comforting breeze on a moonlit night... BC |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
You write so beautifully that I'm with Enchantress, there are times I'm left with nothing to say. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the whole thing, but the ending was perfect |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
If I go back in memory touch everything lightly so my fingers run the edges of windowsills to hold {once} only what may disappear tenderly slidingindarkness You walk the path of my heart and take me back Lauren, and I thank you for your poetry. It rests in me, peacefully~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Would the heart of my nakedness soften holding on spinning in wholeness everything is falling {I am } waiting outside of time while the night collects patterns of voices Silence is here =============================== *sigh* ......... ( I wanna write like this when I grow up)   "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Only you know what this is, in its fullest. The rest of can only admire the surface. And on the surface, this is fine |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren: my fingers run the edges of windowsills to hold {once} only what may disappear tenderly I know this - and yes - amzing write here xxoo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Silence is here... a wonderful line to end this on.. very nicely done as usual... |
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