Open Poetry #25 |
I am the Earth; She is my Sky |
bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
She chases a rainbow and looks for signs, in stars above she puts her faith, and watches for the sky to write her name beside mine, as clouds roll by and dissipate she tracks a wisp and looks for me, then strains to hear the resonate, in songs among the chimes of wind, i sit and wait, and take it in, as i've become her rock through fate, the shelter in her storms within, she knows by now she's in my heart, in friendship and in common bond, of 2 who wear the ball and chain, finding freedom's flight, in paths that reach and touch some times, as i've become the earth to her, and she's become my sky, and as for now, we fill the space with heart and soul and warm embrace, between each other's deepest void |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am liking this one very much. I have no critique of this, Brooklyn... just a sense of thanks... for having touched the earth then sky... this soars! Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?... |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Thanks for the message. I was afraid no one liked what I wrote. I am not always looking for a critique. Knowing I have an audience, good bad or indifferent is enough. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brooklyn - this is beautiful - I loved it - and dont ever be afraid of anyone likeing your writing - write for you and for her . . . write to write - this is beautiful - a nice persepctive . . . xxoo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now Brooklyn...I may be good, certainly I've been bad...but I've never been indifferent! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Absolutely beautiful. You both are very lucky to have this close relationship. |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
This writing is so well written and perfect for the topic you chose. Really well done man, keep up the good work. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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