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Seraphine_CoB Junior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 14LONDON, UK |
Know this- Rain will do most by night. As it did upon our beginning Attacking by force, Over a blackening town What a moonless auditorium And the sky applauding. There, we were caught. Solitary as stone In a desolate marketplace Long piteous architecture, Stark sentinels, but you enveloped them. Why did they inspire you?. It heaved like never before Like a million deluges together. As though a terrible doom-prophet swore it. A torrential scourge upon, and around Our concerted endeavour in defiance of Daddy. I was under-clothed You always over stated this Though happy that you had me, finally My wide consent filled you, As the high and dark fuelled you. You were so elated then, No shower could dilute the bravado. Oddly enough, You loved rain, Though it un-fettered your hair, All heavy-strung tress, Long coal- washed kelp Pasted and soaked, Signed and blessed To a sheer glistened face Only youth could implore. Such a dizzying smile To relinquish the day Into gaping submission. You could defy that flood. But how I hated the cold! And the grim threat of light. Which you knew, more than most, And to save me from drowning Took me almost inside you, Folded secret, so tightly As treasure grabbed drifting By surviving hands Jettisoned from a more noble wreck- Still there and then, It was an act more magical than most. By your skin, Under the leather and grease, Shivering like a child Mute, severely creased The closest I had been to you Unknowingly, now I can see, The nearest that I could be kept. Crushed by chest, or mouth Fingers tended, by slightest build Just legs and shape, faintish but growing- All potential, demanding, a little inquisition. You gave this at instinct, guarding skin, Make-up rinsed, prematurely stripped. Then the gut-ripped and urgent Teamed with the most unrepeatable urge, And streaked through with nerves?- Only to begin with. No words could best it, And so in respect With both mirrored-eyes set, Revering that silence. With no sound but falling And a rib- thundered beat - Prompting each to devour A starved breath between meeting, Screamed a sky compelled kiss And whose the pulse kept the tone At completion of this, To the night, stays unknown. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Know this....nice...James |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very nice.....Enjoyed!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
well, you drenched me completely with this post...will come back for another read this evening WELCOME! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
this is so compelling, and I am in complete awe.....I hope you stay, I look forward to reading more..... please check your email for a special greeting Greeneyes/Lauren~ I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light You come to me out of my dreams Across the night [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-02-2003 04:48 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome to Passion with your passionate "Rain". Margherita |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to our family. Your words make me FEEL the rain here. I look forward to reading more from you.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Much enjoyed your first post... I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! A wonderful write! Will look forward to reading more of your work! |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
No words could best it, And so in respect With both mirrored-eyes set, Revering that silence. With no sound but falling And a rib- thundered beat - Prompting each to devour A starved breath between meeting, Screamed a sky compelled kiss And whose the pulse kept the tone At completion of this, To the night, stays unknown. wow... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read  welcome to passions |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Wow, this is a flood of a debut, sweet friend, this had me gripped all the way through and opened floodgates of strong emotion and hones temotion, this is marvelous, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Seraphine, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a beautiful first post. I enjoyed your poem about the rain...it was very passionate. I hope to read more of your work, and  Hugs, Ethel....garysgirl |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm in awe. Looking out for more. |
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Seraphine_CoB Junior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 14LONDON, UK |
thanks for your comments all- i appreciate it... i just found this site (very nice and cosy isnt it?!) and i'm still trying to fathom it out technically speaking so you have to excuse my confusing with libraries and this book inclusion thing... im enjoying readin all your stuff,and i'll keep posting mine to see if anybody can make sense of it hahaha much love to all Sephie xxxxxxx |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome to Passions! This was an emotion-packed first post! May you enjoy your new poetic family! Warm, welcoming hugs, Earth Angel |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Enjoyed the read of this.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Yes, I really meant it when I said I'd return to read it again. Enjoyable...would like to see this one in the book. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
enjoyed the poem Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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