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She Stood Waiting
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She Stood Waiting |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
In the moonless dark of the night She stands, waiting for me With skin pale and cold as snow And solemn black eyes, as deep as the sea She moves with the breathless wind Rustling leaves and combing grass With slender fingers she taps the lake’s surface Causing ripples on ebon glass Slowly her gaze rises to meet mine An emotionless face with flawless skin Pale rose lips press firmly together Black eyes betray a winter within She stands motionless, shrouded in black folds Until her fingers slowly rise My icy breath catches in my throat And silently I close my eyes Icy fingers brush against my eyelids And cold lips against my cheek My knees buckling beneath me And I fall to the ground, helplessly weak I exhale my last breath, my last bit of warmth And drift into an endless rest In the moonless dark of the night She stood waiting for me; Death ((Well...this is a repost from a poem I posted under a different ID. My sis says this is her favourite, and after hearing she got accepted, I thought I should at least TRY.  ))Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown] |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Hunn, you KNOW I love this, so without a doubt, you have my vote. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
Thanks for suggesting this, Kielo. You're USUALLY *wink* right, so, I thought I'd try. Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown] [This message has been edited by Amara (03-18-2003 02:46 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is hauntingly lovely and the imagery and personification is excellent.. surreal and vivid...well done Amara. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Yes, very well written.My vote. Jason |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This write has striking imagery. Beautiful phrasing for such a somber topic. PS, I'm not the KJ you know. Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Stephanie, this is so very dark but well written, sweet friend, it is a difficult issue to talk about, a simple fact of life, and this is deserving of my vote, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Stephanie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Very nicely done. Dark and haunting, yet not. Enjoyed. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
A ghost-like presence almost ... Enjoyed your imagery. When you think you have heard it all, |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
a haunting write  |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
Thank you, everyone, for the responses!! Votes or not, I like it when people take the time to answer my poems. Thank you SO much. Blessed Be Thee, Stephanie Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown] |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
your sister gave you a good choice *s ~A~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very beautifully penned. My vote is in! ~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This was spine-tingling and ethereal... I loved it! Love & Light, Earth Angel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is haunting excellence... wonderful images! *S* |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
Not only do I agree that this is haunting, but it is also mystical... got my vote ;-) KS |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
Wow! More replies! Jeez, you people RULE! Blessed Be Thee! Stephanie Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown] |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Told you so.  Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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